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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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If I do not move does time pass? At history’s end shines brightly, That omni-infinite star, The Alpha and Omega, So far away so far, But near, it strikes each motion, Hurling shadows to the past, With rays of tempo starkly, Across the mindscape vast. If no one sees me? Or perceives me? Doth this shadow fade, From history’s grasp? If I am still in silence, Removed from all repast, Doth this time wait and wither? This gnashing moment cast? I see and I have seen, The very edges only, Of the scope of this existence, And in each minute atom, Each force weak and strong, Conserved through time’s persistence. Moment by each moment, Strung like strings of harps, The very stuff that is us, That is our minds and hearts, Circumscribes eternity, Reverberates with passion, The fugue of space defines us, From harmony we’re fashioned. And I still hear you; Each trill and chord and tremolo played, Each note and rest and measure, Each pianissimo and crescendo’s fade, And the tempo of your pleasure, I hear you. Ringing. But if I move not, Does time pass? How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Excellent writing here LR..... Really enjoyed this piece much  A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
wow, this made me cry, guess I got leaky eyes today, must need to call my plumber  ....this is really profound...am going to reread several times...and to answer your last question...yes and no....if you move not, you can live in the past, but time still moves on without you....big hugs |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Beautiful... HUSG Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Fairy Colours Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169Sunrise,Fl,US |
Now... I know that you know this is awesome right? --A Little Fairy-- |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Perhaps awesome is not the word I would use. This is actually much more simple than that. It is, in a few lines and words the complete embodiment of my philosphy, theology, and passion. Thanks all... How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Time...and opportunity...moves without you, I think. Excellent poem. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
This was excellent. I can prove it as well because my heart beat increased!! The last two stanza's did it for me. I so admire the intertwining of music in poetry. Welcome to Passion's. I look forward to seeing more of your work. |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Very, very sad indeed...maybe that's just me...LR...i've read a couple of your poems and you sound very promising...please post more...i'll be willing to read them! Starboards (Ashley) "I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget" |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
The entire universe is music Sally. Witness your own beating heart. We are all songs. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
A very beautiful poem indeed! Loved the title! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Local Rebel, I agree with Balladeer, excellent poem. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, I agree! This is most excellent, indeed!  :Denise |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful LG, a poet philospher! I think if you stand still long enough, time will cease to be..in your space....but when you open your eyes and move, everything fast forwards to the 'real' future....keep trying!  |
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Mistletoe-rag New Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 2 |
Nicely done 'hawk'....yep, I remember you! The "charming' one.......Merry Christmas my old friend....Toe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rebel - Time marches on ... this poem is extremely well done. I hear the ticking of the clock and the music plays on. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn you're good |
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