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Alone At Last (repost) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Left alone at last my love, you holding my hand so tight. The doctor gave his final report, that I was losing this mortal fight. I feel my life slipping away; and see that truth in your eyes. You watch me with such tenderness counting all my breathless sighs. The last few months has made me glad, to leave this cancerous place. But the last thing I want to see in this life is your sweet and smiling face. With a moan I take my last breath my eyes tell you it is so and closing forever in this life I watch you let me go. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Not knowing you I am unsure of the "I" in your work .... It is hauntingly reminiscent to me. The struggle to let go is very vibrant in your work and is very true to life. Peace How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
This is sad but also very beautiful. I especialy liked the ending. "I watch you let me go." JOY |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
PoetfeVine, Good form, good paint, Very warm, but I didn't faint. I take it this is just an excellent poem. *L* sy |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Oh PDV: The peacefulness for those in letting go love they gave in our memories we'll know HUSG Yesterday is but today's memory and tomorrow is today's dream... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Just so you don't think I'm ill...I wrote this to show the last moments of life from a dying woman's perspective. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
You have then mastered a perspective you do not have. It is a painful but essential reminder. Thankyou |
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Coegwyr Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
A real tear-jerker PDV, I’m glad to hear it wasn’t for real. Another masterful piece. ( Or mistressful if there is such a word and if there isn’t there should be ) |
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Beri Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 149 |
"I watch you let me go" That just struck me as a beautiful way to end such a beautiful, yet sad poem. It made me think so much of the battle my aunt lost to cancer. So sad, but you made me see it kind of in her perspective I guess. Thank you for the deVine. Again, beautiful... If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I wrote this long ago as the man who held the hand... I can't relive when the last kiss began, So long ago… I can't release your hand, Your fingers tight, I won't let go… I could drown in eyes so blue, Like ice they melt me, Into you.. And the last dance, Goes on and on, And I am in you… And the last dance, Is the longest song, And I am in your…eyes.. Dying blue.. I am drowning in your eyes Don't save me Blue is the color of my soul, It sure looks good in you… Around the evening glows, The fusion flows, I am with you… I die for you…. to be you I…….. die………. blue Dying blue.. I am drowning in your eyes. Don't save me. Dying blue.. I am drowning in your eyes. Don't save me. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
PDV, This was so real. I just can't figure out who wrote the poem. Very well written, indeed. Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Such beautiful insight....What a special piece Poet... "I watch you let me go" So beautifully executed..... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is a tear jerker  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is superb, Sharon. Very well done and from such a unique perspective! Denise |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Such feeling this piece evokes! Thanks for another great one. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
From that perspective you've done a wonderful job! Loved it! |
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Dolphins3 Member
since 1999-09-30
Posts 135Wisconsin |
Poet, This is a very emotional piece. I really enjoyed it.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this... aches |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Dusting off shelves in here, I found this and it reminded me of when Willow left, those were her exact words, "Now let me go." Death is such a selfish time isn't it? You did it justice Sharon. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Repost repost, its probably better this time ARCTIC WIND |
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