Open Poetry #4 |
Falling (does this poem need something??) |
RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Falling It's not so much the knife that scares me- as the words that sever arteries from the heart… the thought from the feeling… an emotion from the response leaving me in pieces at the feet of someone wearing shoes I have never seen before. For falling off a ladder isn't from looking down, falling out of bed requires more than rolling over, and falling out of love is not just letting go…….. RB ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
RB, I love this poem the way it is, I wouldn't change a thing. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wow ! Powerful as it stands. ------------------ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Robert...love it just as it is...very powerful piece. Makes you think. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I wrote it awhile back and to read it tonight it seemed to lack a word or two.... maybe I am being too critical of myself ------------------ if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I also think it is perfect the way it is. Very powerful. ------------------ Denise |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Then I shant mess with it [This message has been edited by RobertB (edited 11-12-1999).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Please don't change a thing, it's perfect as is ------------------ Alis volat propriis (She flies with her own wings) |
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