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mc
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 67
México

0 posted 1999-12-20 02:07 PM


Many nights at ease
bring the joy of  dreams
that somehow have deceit
the importance in believes

I dream of you
(or more likely I bring you into them)
to capture the essence of once upon
to rest you in my glorious tomb

So, yes I've come insane
but delirious in an armonic state
where there's an empty shake
starting to tremble in grace

How can anyone blame me
for the things I do
or the things not knowing I don't do
for there's so much at hand
than just to go and grab.

Go on and dream away
come near or get away
while there's some reason
beneath my veins

  While light and day
  are fresh and out!!




 mcestrada

© Copyright 1999 Maricarmen Estrada Elosúa - All Rights Reserved
starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
1 posted 1999-12-20 02:19 PM


I liked the way that you worded this poem...shows lots of emotion...great job!

Starboards

 
"I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget"

mc
Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 67
México
2 posted 1999-12-20 04:18 PM


Thanks Star, I sure enjoyed writing this one as my fingers ran through the computer not exactly knowing what they wrote...

 mcestrada

samsonheart
Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72
Missouri rez.
3 posted 1999-12-20 06:01 PM


mc, i thought this was an excellent piece. you have a wonderful gift.

samsonheart

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 1999-12-20 06:31 PM


Mari, this is beautiful.
Very unusual and delicate.

I like it much!

Hugs, K.  

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 1999-12-20 07:28 PM


This is an interesting piece of poetry, much deeper than it appears  
mc
Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 67
México
6 posted 1999-12-21 04:54 PM


Thanks for your kind words you all!!
I really appreciate it!!!

 mcestrada

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