Shutting me off...is so hard to do

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Open Poetry #4

Shutting me off...is so hard to do

The Jackal
Member

since 1999-08-13

Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 1999-12-16 01:35 AM

i dont think you like me pretty girl
i dont fit your mold
and your checking your hair
in my eyes
once again..
shutting me off
from your world
why the hell should i care?
so i know i dont fit in there
your perfect little hate
your perfect time
that you make me wait
what if you mean everything
nothing and anything
despite all the carnage
i still flow to you
whats exactly my problem
its time like this
when i know thats its true
my faith is falling
when i say
or scream
i do love hating you..

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

1 posted 1999-12-16 03:20 AM

You have captured her personality and a whole relationship in just a few lines.
This is wonderful!
Liz

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

2 posted 1999-12-17 06:02 AM

Powerful words - and a great capturing. Well done!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2005-04-15 06:15 AM

yep...I relate

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2007-11-12 06:55 PM

I enjoyed your poem, but i would like to say, how did you come up with that name

ARCTIC WIND

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