Open Poetry #4 |
You Never Said Good-Bye |
Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
What we had was special, I can't believe it's gone. Deep inside my heart, the battle rages on. My pain turns to anger, then to disbelief. The time we had together was far too short and brief. Life was filled with laughter whenever you were around. But now loneliness is the silence of a heart that makes no sound. Two hearts once tied together have now split apart. And inside my broken one, you'll find fragments of my heart. My yesterdays that were once my dreams of tomorrow, Have been left behind in tears and sorrow. No amount of tears could wash away the pain. Now memories of what once was, are all that remain. My illusions of love are now tattered and torn, As these heart strings of mine have been frayed and worn. But what hurts the most and still makes me cry, Is that when you left, you never said good-bye. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Wonderful poem Eloise! I know how much it hurts when people don't say goodbye. The other thought that comes to mind is when you lose a loved one and never got to say goodbye. Both are very hard to deal with, but you WILL move on eventually The more you praise and celebrate your life, the more there IS to celebrate. ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Eloise - I'm so sorry for your pain. Nothing makes it okay to leave without saying goodbye. Your thoughts were well said, my friend. Love and hugs to you - ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is an excellent poem displaying lots of passion. I wanted to say that you made me think of two special people in my life. One that left and didn't leave a note and didn't say goodbye and another that did say goodbye and left a note and still wanted to keep in touch. Many times after the first left without saying goodbye I thought to myself..if only she had just said goodbye. Now the second leaves and says goodbye and I realized in my case its not a goodbye or lack of goodbye that hurt me or was important to me. The challenge is facing the truth as to what part I played in the failure of this relationship. Each time I want to do better and if the fault is with the other person I need to improve my selection capabilities...yet my relationshiops seem to fail again and again sometimes for the same reasons. I've had too many goodbyes. James |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
No, tears cannot wash the pain away....but time will. Bless our resilience. Excellent poem, Eloise. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a real heartbreaker. So sad. Very well done, Eloise. Denise |
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Theraaven Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 11 |
Very Pretty, I enjoyed it...Just remember All the goodbyes in the world don't amount to one good hello ) |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Thanks Isis, Marge, jmlee, Balladeer, Denise and Theraaven I'm glad you all liked it. Hang in there James the right one will eventually come along. Great comment Theraaven, you're exactly right about that. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
How sad |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Your words flow to all the right places....Maybe in those words someone may take that extra step and say good-bye to someone while they are leaving their life. In all the good-byes I have found it is a risk that we all take...... that it may come when we don't want it to. Makes me wonder what is harder after all the good byes.....Is it saying Hello wondering if the good-bye will come?.....or the Good-bye at the end that did come.< !signature--> Share what you are for you are what you share [This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 12-12-1999).] |
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MADDavid Junior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 26Carrollton, TX, USA |
I can't imagine the horror of losing a loved one that has left without saying goodbye but I do know the pain of losing a mate and not being able to say goodbye. I feel your pain. Time is the great healer with the Lord's help. Another loved one will come into your life and the pain will cease, but the heart is never the same somehow. God Bless you during this holiday season. I know how rough it can be. I cried through both Christmas and New Years last year. Shine a light and darkness disappears. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Eloise, this is superb and sad - well done!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Eloise this is very sad, I'm sorry for your pain. *hugs* What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Rod Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 149Auckland New Zealand |
Adversity is a great character-builder, and a can bring out great poetry as we see here. But that is so little consolation at this time - I know that. There is no substitute for a gentle hand on your shoulder - you have mine, for what it may be worth. Be strong. Rod |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
I just want to say thank you to all who read and responded. I'm very touched by the heartwarming feelings expressed by each and every one of you. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Very sad indeed Eloise but beautifully written.... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
This is an excellent piece you've penned, Eloise. I know the feelings you express. Great job. It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang this one hits home |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
very much enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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