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Theraaven Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 11 |
In another time your soul was the pillow my head came to rest upon with the night The flame you shared cast off a brilliant glow even midnight smiled and basked unafraid in your light Each morning the sun rose and showed off pink hued clouds and lavender skies but when they gazed upon you they faltered jealous of colors they had never seen except in your eyes And though your eyes do not come to rest upon me any longer and see in me the things you held so dear The memories I have of you are no less stronger You are just as close to me as when you were near. Though there are times I wonder if I rustle through your mind and if the memories we had together are old and faded Like a photo that sits in an album discolored by time Or snow slowly melting from what the rain did For many will go on with their lives searching for that segment of puzzle that finishes their rhyme I can wander my whole life and keep on looking But that piece is about to raise her eyes to mine |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Theraaven. I love this piece. Very nice!  Denise |
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Michael II Junior Member
since 1999-12-11
Posts 21Here, there, everywhere |
Very nice I like it welcome to passions |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Welcome! This is an exquisite entry.  [This message has been edited by Seaangel (edited 12-11-1999).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TheRaaven - This is really a beautiful piece. Welcome to Passions and hope to see more. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! This is a wonderful poem..it certainly will 'rustle through my mind' for a while!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
What a poem to enter in with! Excellent! WELCOME TO PASSIONS! <*\\\>< Jesus is the reason for the season |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Welcome Raven.....Very nice entry Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Welcome to our family - and what a graceful entry! Looking forward to more. K |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Beautiful imagery in this! "In another time your soul was the pillow my head came to rest upon with the night" I love those lines. The ending was great! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Very beautiful poem TheRaaven. Welcome to Passions |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Very nice entry poem!! Love your use of language and imagery. Welcome to Passions Raven. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions |
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