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DreamEvil
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0 posted 1999-12-09 05:09 AM


I stand upon battle-scarred ramparts,
slickened by the slime of years.
Foreboding is what this place imparts,
with echoes of pain-filled tears.

A heavy fog flows through broken walls ,
tinged with the taste of the sea.
Each night this ancient fortress recalls,
days filled with former glory.

A chill wind adds to the mystery,
of this former Warlord's lair.
Awesome sensations of history,
fill the salty evening air.

Most of the castle fell prey to time,
though ageless is how it feels.
The walls are covered in salty rime,
that hides more than it reveals.

Closing my eyes I hear battle's cry,
from echoes out of the past.
My ears do hear the first soldier die,
my heart is what hears the last.

The Warlord made one fatal mistake,
for he stole a royal bride.
Paternal rage was left in his wake,
stolen daughter at his side.

Suffice it to say the fortress fell,
but not to treacherous greed.
The Warlord's own love rang its death-knell,
for that did his soldiers bleed.

A mirrored pool lay in a garden,
in which the princess would sit.
She knew both men's resolve would harden,
only a death would end it.

The walls were breached by her father's hordes,
soldiers that lived to cause strife.
Amidst the din from warrior's swords,
the princess took her own life.

Her heart'sblood ran into the water,
as her soul sought its release.
In grief from the death of his daughter,
the emperor left in peace.

In that pool I discovered magic,
and seen what comes of a wish.
I learned that love is sometimes tragic,
from the swarms of small red fish.


©1999 DreamEvil



 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)


© Copyright 1999 DreamEvil - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 1999-12-09 05:21 AM


If I hadn't been up in the middle of the night, I would have missed this gem. It seems so many good ones get slipped to the back so fast.
I ejoyed it!
Liz

Severn
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2 posted 1999-12-09 05:41 AM


Dear Dream - drama spoken so sensuously. Well done. This is magic indeed.

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 1999-12-09 05:49 AM


Scott, you've been writing some really good poetry lately! I've like everything you've done! Enjoyed the magic of this tale very much.  

hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 1999-12-09 06:02 PM


Wow, what a tragic, but well told tale. I like it  
Julie Jordan Scott
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5 posted 1999-12-09 09:16 PM


Marvelously crafted work.  Dramatic, enticing, invigorating read.

 I am a Life Purpose Coach who specializes in assisting
men and women to clarify their Life Purpose and then in turn
live true to their purpose. After 5 years working with the
Severely Mentally Ill in County Mental Health, I gave up the
bureaucracy (and safe, secure blanket) of this environment
to pursue my own purpose and passion.


WhtDove
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6 posted 1999-12-09 09:25 PM


Very well written Scott! Sad it is, but very well done!
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
7 posted 1999-12-09 09:28 PM


DE,
A grand rendition, masterfuly done.
With words of wisdom but not one drop of fun.
Enjoyed.

Tara Simms
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8 posted 1999-12-09 09:37 PM


I like this Scott.  You tell a great story.

 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



Denise
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9 posted 1999-12-09 10:09 PM


Once again, well done. You are a master of the written word.

 Denise



Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
10 posted 1999-12-10 02:14 AM


Egad my friend, a tale masterfully told with a painful poignance poetically attacking the soul.
Michael
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11 posted 1999-12-10 03:39 AM


And melancholy reigned the land.  Wonderful work Scott...very sad.  Your medevil side always rocks.


Michael

Marilyn
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12 posted 1999-12-10 01:37 PM


Well written Scott. Thankyou for directing me, I would have missed it otherwise. You do have a masterful way with a tale.
Andrew Scott
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13 posted 1999-12-10 04:03 PM


Most excellent Sir Dream... top shelf material.  I bow to you and yours.
DreamEvil
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14 posted 1999-12-10 07:30 PM


This is a tale told of an ancient fortress on the island of Okinawa. I was there as a boy and remembered watching the darting red fish in the pool, each a drop of that princess' blood.

Thank you all for replying to this tale.

DreamEvil
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15 posted 1999-12-10 07:30 PM


This is a tale told of an ancient fortress on the island of Okinawa. I was there as a boy and remembered watching the darting red fish in the pool, each a drop of that princess' blood.

Thank you all for replying to this tale.

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