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The Storm |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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The storm ~First Knight~ Like the fire in the sky, so burns my love for you. Deep within my heart, my feelings turning blue. The flash of light, the pouring rain, the wind blowing hard. I have lost your love for me I see, among the mighty storm. Searching now in the darkness, That you brought with you, Grabbing for any moment shared, Will you give one or two? As the night takes over what once was light, I can see you fading away. Taking my dreams, thoughts and spirit, and watching them all decay. My life goes on, Now the storm is gone, Left only with growing pains. Life renewed, From your storm that brewed, And only the water remains. Share what you are for you are what you share |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I liked this one too!  |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Romantic Heart |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The final two lines....wow, they sum it up perfectly. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
First, Enjoyed the read. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This is excellent First Knight. I enjoyed it very much. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
How wonderful each of you are because coments from you with such talent brings a smile to me Share what you are for you are what you share |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
This poem could be a song! Was that intended? Very nice, Sir Knight. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I agree with Sally. It has a very lyrical quality. Nicely written, Knight. To the world you might be just one person but to one person you might just be the world. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
It was not Sally....but I will sing it to you ..LOL I am at your service Thank you Balladeer [This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 12-07-1999).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent work my friend! Welcome to the group! That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
I liked this. A wonderful ending. Those last two lines say it all. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
You touched me .....Wonderful piece First Knight.... btw...like your signature A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you so much for your words Betty and Pepper. It goes a long way to my heart |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You are quite a gifted writer. I enjoyed this one too! Denise |
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