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Willem
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since 1999-11-18

Posts 139
Inverness, FL, USA

0 posted 1999-12-04 01:11 AM

Written after a hike through the mountains of
West Java a long time ago.

MONSOON RAIN

When finally the cool, dark night had fallen,
there were no sounds of drum or bamboo flute,
nor of the restless, stealthy stirring
of prowling killers and their prey.

And I was just another one of them
that barely breathed, just waiting,
in silent, anxious apprehension,
for fate to start its cruel play.

But then, a distant rumble, getting closer,
a hissing threat, as monsoon rain
hit smouldering mountain flanks
scorched by primeval fire.

A brutal gale tore through the sleepy trees,
awakening their shivering, shrinking leaves
with myriads of icey rain drops, as lethal
as strafing bullets, and as merciless...

And nowhere could we hide from nature's fury,
the blinding flashes, deafening thunder,
the clouds turned into raging torrents,
the awesome wedding feast of earth and sky!

by Willem

Eloise
Senior Member

since 1999-11-27

Posts 1096
Wyoming

1 posted 1999-12-04 01:16 AM

Willem - Enjoyed this poem. I especially liked the last stanza. Good imagery!

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 1999-12-04 05:43 AM

We have monsoon rain here in the southwest, but I've never looked at it this way! Excellent!

caroline
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since 1999-08-16

Posts 1218
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3 posted 1999-12-04 07:50 AM

Excellent Willem

Great imagery...and glad you made it safely through the storm!

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It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 1999-12-04 08:34 AM

This is intensely visual, Willem.... Nice job for sure - Let's see more.....I'm watchin' for it....

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

5 posted 1999-12-04 09:01 AM

Willem
Thank you for the experience in Java. I had never been there before.
Very will written, Willem
Liz

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 1999-12-04 01:06 PM

Willem...excellent job, your words are full of vivd imagery

Willem
Member

since 1999-11-18

Posts 139
Inverness, FL, USA

7 posted 1999-12-04 11:38 PM

Thank you for your kind commentary, friends!
This poem is one of my own favorites, because
I just can't help being overwhelmed by the
beauty of God's creation in so many places
I've lived and worked at, or even just seen
during a brief visit. And I want to include
the many nice people of every race, religion,
culture and language I've been privileged to
communicate with. This is a great world!

Willem

Poertree
Senior Member

since 1999-11-05

Posts 1359
UK

8 posted 1999-12-05 06:41 AM

HA .. you've been hiding this one Willem!

Really excellent imagery ..

Philip

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