Open Poetry #4 |
Night Dreams |
Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
As you lay here next to me Nothing between us but the sheet It is the beginning of the end Of where the two of us do meet I know you lie awake in the dark Thinking of whom I do not know I wonder where your mind is I know it's a place I never go I know you well enough to say That someone else is in our bed You dream of her and all you'd do While you lay next to me instead The darkness may hide your face So I can't look into your eyes It can't cover up the truth When I know you're telling me lies As I make our bed the next morning Smoothing the wrinkles out of the sheet I realize that I've lost you to your dreams Where you and another secretly meet |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
nicely written |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Such sadness, Deb. You have described one of the most helpless feelings of all. Hope it's not true for you. [This message has been edited by Balladeer (edited 11-09-1999).] |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
MM..."Deer" not true now, but in the past. Things looking brighter every day! |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
ewww...so sad...beautifully written. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Aurora's Fire Junior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 28Oshawa, Ontario, Canada |
Very sad, very emotionally, I really liked it. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, Deb, that is a lonely feeling to be laying next to someone who's not there. I felt the pain and emptiness behind this one. My heart goes out. Michael |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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