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I Surrender |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
To your touch, And to your skill. I give you everything and more, You touch me to my very core. I'll be to you, Just what you need. You've sowed in me, A precious seed. You give to me, All I could dream. You even cover, With whipped cream. What I really want to say, You complete me every day. So close your eyes, Take my hand. Together, We'll find the promised land. [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 12-01-1999).] [This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 12-01-1999).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Smiles...for someone who said she didn't think she could love....sounds like you got the idea down pretty good my friend  ------------------ "When you come to the edge of the light which is all you know. And are about to step off into the darkness that is unknown...Faith is knowing one of two things will happen...there will be something to stand on...or you will learn how to fly." -Unknown |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
lol im sorry but from such a beautiful poem all i can think about is varsity blues and the whip cream bikini ah well sweet dreams tonight, balladeer would understand =) |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
aaaahhh, Liked it. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sounds good to me! Great poem, Marilyn! ------------------ Denise |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Ruth my friend....I love very deeply. The trouble is; I don't love ones accessable...lol. Kevin...LMAO...what a picture you left in my head! Thanks Ohme. Denise....Thanks my friend. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
good poem Marilyn....liked the style. I did. RB |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lovely Marilyn. Love can be hard - understatement of the year! (Millenium?) |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Very beautiful, Marilyn  It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
lovely can I ask what you do with the whipped cream? (LOL) |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Robert..Thankyou. Severn....definately the understatement of the millenium!! caroline....Thankyou Seaangel...the reference wasn't meant to be sexual in nature...lol. It was meant more in getting everything you want with whipped cream on top. :0 |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Very beautiful...and I really dig the word-art picture of a vase. The scheme had me a little baffled until I read it outloud...then all became clear. I can see the tetrameter, but there is some variance between iambic and trochiac...or it could be just me. Thank you for posting this. Alicat  The Persnikitty |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much! |
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Kitty** Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 428Charlottesville,VA USA |
WOW..this I like and it's one I can identify with.. seem to love the unaccesable too!!! ;-( |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Beautiful indeed Marilyn!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marilyn - This is truly beautiful, as love is supposed to be. Hope the tide turns and takes you out on the sea of love. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Lovely thoughts, indeed. ~sigh~ I love love.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Beautiful Marilyn What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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