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The Knoll
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The Knoll |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
A mile or so outside of town, At end of River Road, There sits a shack all broken down, A yard that's never mowed. The kids all say a witch lives there, Is only seen at night, With wrinkled face and scraggly hair, In shadow of moon's light. One summer day I got my pole, Decided to go fishin', A mess of perch, I'd eat 'em whole, Is what I was a wishin'. Down River Road, I was a funnin', Til I neared her shack, Then my feet, they took off runnin', I never did look back. I tripped and fell just past her place, My ankle, I felt pain, I heard a noise, then saw her face, The tears my face did stain. She said, "My dear, you'll be all right, I'm here to care for you," I must admit, a fearful fright, Of what to me she'd do. She helped me to her little house, A hobblin' on one leg, All the while, scared little mouse, Was ready to her beg. She laid me on her quilted bed, Beside oak rocking chair, Not another word was said, As stroked my matted hair. How long I lay, I do not know, Because I fell asleep To sounds of rocking to and fro, As she made not a peep. I awoke in dark of night, When heard my mother's voice, "Where is my son, is he all right?" Within I felt rejoice. I was carried to the chevy, And laid upon back seat, Down the road from river levee, And perch I did not eat. "You are so kind, we thank you so," I heard my mother say, "But now it's time for us to go, It's been a trying day." "I'd like to ask one question though, If you do not mind, Then I promise that we'll go, Again, you've been so kind." "Have you children of yourself? You seem so motherly, I saw no photos on the shelf, At least none I could see." She said, "My son has golden hair, A twinkle in his eye, With all my heart for him I'll care, Until the day I die." To nearby knoll, she turned her head, A small white cross was there, "Can't you see him?" is what she said, "My son with golden hair." [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 12-01-1999).] |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ah Gees! I had no idea what this was going to be about, and wow - what a fabulously crafted twist!! I really really liked this for it's originality, and for your structure of verse that you used! Very enjoyable to read, indeed !!! You should post more often, and I should READ more often!! BRAVO!!!  ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Is there no subject that you can't write about, Mike?? Very nice work...  |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ah, Mike this is so touching, so beautiful. Well done. I was surprised by the ending. Very nice. ------------------ Denise |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Lots of talent here, Mike. I likee this very much. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Mike Your talent shines through This is wonderful, and so engaging and well written liz |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very well done Mike. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Man, what a heartbreaker Mike, well written indeed |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all muchly. Wanted to try something a little different... you are all very kind in your comments. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
And different it is and way too beautiful to be where I found it. Up you go ! : ) [This message has been edited by Munda (edited 12-07-1999).] |
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