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Open Poetry #4

Lines of Wire

Seaangel
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

0 posted 1999-12-01 06:17 PM

(This is an oldy but a goody.)

Lines of wire
crossed too many times
see
me I do

walk
the air is lashing
its blue tongue
on my
throat

the leaves slip
swelling waxy green
against my arm

the cars grind
shiny on the
road hot and hungry

the sun colours my face
wettens my skin
heat tendrils hazing
to gusts of
chill wind

the dewy colours
dream into the distance
snap proudly against the
foreground I
listen

RSEvans
Senior Member

since 1999-10-23

Posts 1147
Tulsa, OK, USA

1 posted 1999-12-01 06:40 PM

Good visuals...I especially like the wind's blue tounge

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 1999-12-01 06:58 PM

Reading this was a sensory experience. I like your original use of words, "dewey colors, wettens". Enjoyed the feeling of this.

Seaangel
Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand

3 posted 1999-12-01 08:44 PM

thanks, rs, martie. I was trying to give a very sensual experience..much like poems of yours!

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

4 posted 1999-12-02 07:16 AM

My friend - I always mean it when I say I like your distinctive style. (See you in the morning!) K

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