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Dancing Leaves
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Dancing Leaves |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA 
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Delicate leaves, now brown with age Fall silently from their lofty height, And Fall turns like a books' page As Summer fades from our sight. I look for your smile in Autumn's leaves Falling, turning in the wind, And pause a while to feel the breeze As they drift off round the bend. The leaves find the river in its slowing flow And float upon the water, drifting Round and round and to and fro Dancing gracefully before sinking. I watch their dance and there it is The smile I've been searching for Even in death they dance like this Swirling with passion at death's door. It is as though you've returned this year To grace me with your smile, And even though I know your gone I can pretend for a while... I can pretend and watch the dancing leaves. ------------------ Once I was brilliant, now I no longer shine, but the twinkle in my eye speaks of another time. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent imagery, Robert. I can see the dead leaves falling, being blown into the water, drifting and then sinking, signalling the end of an era, one which will begin anew in the warmth of Spring...ah, the cycles of life. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautiful imagery here and touching emotion. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well done!  |
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lostboy Member
since 1999-11-21
Posts 275New Hampshire, USA |
I liked this this very much also. Nice work!! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Robert. Yes, they are beautiful even in the face of death. I loved the imagery in this and the message. And I am a strong believer in pretending...at least for now. I couldn't have expressed my feelings any better than you have here. Thank you. ------------------ Denise |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous - can't say it enough. So evocative. I love 'The leaves find the river in its slowing flow'. Well done. K |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Thanks all! Hope you had a nice Thanksgiving and are looking forward to Christmas... |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
Lovely poem. I like best I look for your smile in Autumn's leaves. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
RS, this was an awesome poem. I like the comparison of the fallen, dancing leaves to the person who has gone...beautiful. ------------------ Nail to the mast her holy flag, Set every threadbare sail- And give her to the god of storms, The lightning and the gale! -Oliver Wendell Holmes |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Thanks again all...this poem is actually about my dad. I had a chance to use metaphor here moreso than in "To the Cabinetmaker". Nature was his favorite thing and he loved the Autumn colors. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Love the imagery...and this is a gorgeous piece Robert...... ------------------ A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
really nice work, I loved this |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wonderful imagery! I loved it! |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
I know I'm just echoing everyone else, but i had to put my oar in and repeat 'wonderful' & 'lovely' again. Am waiting for more. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSEvans, I think Balladeer said it best, good job. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Amazing how melancholy, but beautiful, Fall really becomes when seen through your eyes... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful imagery and it flows so smoothly |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Thanks again everyone. You don't know how much value you give to my poetry. It really has no deeper meaning than when my friends read it and comment. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ah gees Robert, this is breathtaking....I too, think Balladeer said it best, (he is so darn good with words!) and I knew it was for your father as soon as I started reading it! It is absolutely exquisite, you certainly have done him proud by writing something so beautiful with him in mind...I too, love the colors of fall, and the way they finally turn loose and dance and sway before touching the ground......what beautiful imagery here. I could actually see them falling as you wrote....Thank you for sharing something so personal with us... ------------------ ~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Well, it seems all the best adjectives have been used. This was so lovely....a grand tribute to your father. A poem that you can see, hear, smell or feel is the best poem of all. You've got that here. Wonderful. |
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