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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Hi fellow students! Seems like the teacher needs a little time off and so I’m going to sub for her for the Month of April so she can keep up with her busy schedule. I don’t require that much except I don’t like Spitballs in my classroom and so if we can refrain From that practice, I will be a happy camper What I thought would be fun to try would be to Write a poem in the exact same form as a well known poem. In this case, the poem is Robert Frost’s “Stopping by the woods on a Snowy Evening”. Please notice the rhyme Scheme of this poem. I had read it several times Before I actually became aware of the form then One day I decided to look more closely and See what makes it so beautiful, and It is that Repetition of the third line ending into the following verse and the magnificent last verse That has four rhyming lines. Here is the poem: Stopping by the Woods on a Snowy Evening Whose woods these are I think I know. His house is in the village though; He will not see me stopping here To watch his woods fill up with snow My little horse must think it queer To stop without a farmhouse near Between the woods and frozen lake The darkest evening of the year. He gives his harness bells a shake To ask if there is some mistake. The only other sound's the sweep Of easy wind and downy flake . The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, And miles to go before I sleep, And miles to go before I sleep Robert Frost . The rhyme scheme is AABA BBCB CCDC DDDD He maintains the meter throughout So here is the assignment: THE RHYTHMS OF FROST Good luck.!! The results will be beautiful if you Write to the exact form Have fun and I will be checking in each day To read your lovely poems Lizzy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Here is what I wrote in the rhythms of Frost. I did deviate in the number of verses, but the rhyme and meter are that of Frost's poem, and it seem to work. Silence at Dawn The clouded eyes of dawn invite The lonely raindrops of the night To lay a mist on hilly crest Before she hugs the edge of light An antlered buck stood statuesque His robust silhouette was pressed Against horizon’s silver glaze And penciled black on meadow’s breast His marble eye was still and gazed Where darts of light had pierced the haze Leg lifted in a frozen hush And bosom pompously upraised A footstep hesitantly flush Against a bed of forest lush Was of a deer, alert and preen About to forage in the brush The air was cool, the dawn serine As fog arose from wooded scene It roused the earth in softest sound Of wary hoof on spongy green Profusion’s eye was sweetly crowned By nature’s offering unbound But silent peace was too profound God’s silent peace was too profound Elizabeth Santos April 1, 2004 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh my Lady Santos. First you offer up one of the best poets, and then you ask for deviation? Nay, m'lady...I'll try to emulate Frost, but I shan't ever emulate you. Heck, girl, I can't even keep up with myself! But I am SO glad to see that April is blooming roses and roads in the Workshop! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Dear Elizabeth, Now, here, is a challange indeed, one that you have met well. If, at all possible, I will try to pen something that is not too offensive for this format. Thank you for this opportunity, and help in knowledge through verse. Doc |
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eor Senior Member
since 2002-09-26
Posts 959blues & greys |
Heres my try... Death of Summer One winter’s morn I sought to weep My body captured -neath the sheets The suns embrace upon my face Inscribed my skin three layers deep With lines of beauty and of grace. The Winter’s morn had won the race, Nature’s course had been set in stone, Held up by nothing more than lace. Yet that mourning I sat alone, And watched the light that it had shone Lifted so high up in the sky Like it had something to atone One Winter’s morn I broke and cried When natures stone fell from the sky Forever winter will survive Forever winter will survive. "So what befalls the flawless? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
eor, this is absolutely stunning. You should post this poem separately so that all can read it. Otherwise, it may be overlooked. You met the challenge, and so beautifully Thank you! Liz |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Liz - Thank you for these wonderful paintings of words presented in your poem. I loved the scene. Well done. And thank you for this assignment. Eor - Wonderful poem! Chilling.. :-)(no pun intended). It really was a moving peice. You do need to post this separately! I almost missed it. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Oh dear, I've been away for a while (playing in the sandbox with Marge) and coming back in here I find the Queen of my dream has taken over the month of April. Hi Liz, so nice to see you again and I certainly wil try to meet your assignment. That is...if those sheep leave me alone for a while. Only one to go, maybe tomorrow or the day next. Got a lovely pair of twins this afternoon. Liz did you know????? Only 7 days of work left for me and then I can count myself retired!!!!! WOW there IS mercy in this world. Till soon, Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
I gave it a shot, here's the link. /pip/Forum89/HTML/000290.html |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Your poems always leave me speechless, Liz! Awesome! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I would say that this challenge rendered some exceptionally beautiful poetry. I thought every poem was well written and everyone followed the rhyme scheme and meter. I applaude your poetry, everyone and also Kevin's which is posted in #32. Great stuff here! Thank you all Liz |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Elizabeth, It is I, who must thank you. You brought something unique into our classroom to be studied, pondered, pawed, and probed, stripped to it's elements, and then, possibly, re-constructed. I thank you again for a wonderful challenge. Doc |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
bowing to you, Dr Moose |
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