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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Soundly sleep, dawning dreams whisper, "white feathered flight". In immersed images without words, soaring sights, shifting scenes billow by, clouds condense, feathers fall, downward drift, lightness lost, dreams descend after all. Tender touch wounded wings healing hurt, fallen friend, arc aloft, avian, as allowed and ascend, reach rapport, skyward soar be unbound, flying free, innocent Icarus, sans Suns' scorched imagery. Feathered flight as appeared during dreamscapes' descent. Wonders witnessed while free-falling from firmament. Footage filmed left location this time to alight, where, when woven with words, wakens white feathered flight. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Very good usage of double alliteration, though I know in some cases it was double doubled.  The foot wanders between 8 and 7 counts, though that could just be the way I was reading.[This message has been edited by Alicat (12-21-2003 09:26 PM).] |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alicat, Thanks for the reply. Read in anapestic trimeter (if I've done it right), it should be four feet to the line, but the punctuation may have thrown you off. Either that, or I screwed up. Have a great holiday. Doc |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is beautiful, Doc! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Martie, Thank you .Best wishes to you for the upcoming year and all that follow. Doc |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This dawning dream is definitely delightful.. Your work is always the best, Doc - Thank you for sharing this beauty with us... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Doc~ Some days, you are too cool for school~ This is fantabulous !!! *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
May I just drool? |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Simply beautiful! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Nan, I feel as if I've gone from illiterate to alliterate in no time flat under your tutelage. Thanks. Doc Dear Marge, Aw shucks! Flattery will get you a free spin on the 'go round. See ya there! Doc Sunshine, Heck, dear lady, it wasn't all that, but, if you do I'll pretend not to notice ( either that, or I'll say it's mine to cover for you!) Thanks. Doc Endlessecho, Thanks. Part of this, as the words would imply, I remembered on waking, filling in the blanks as best as allowed. I'm glad you liked. Doc |
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