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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2003-11-19 06:24 PM


When seems you've exhausted all options, my friend,
the top of your form may be just 'round the bend.
Dispell your illusions and begin again.

There's much to be said for remembering when
achieving your goals was still possible then,
when seems you've exhausted all options, my friend.

Seclusion, confusion, the list never ends,
what seems insurmountable, factored by ten!
Dispell your illusions and begin again.

Your grief can't consume what's not offered, so, fend
off all sorry feelings of pointlessness, mend,
when seems you've exhausted all options, my friend.

Herein lies the message I'm trying to send,
"Old Saws" like "Old Tires" re-tread with a pen
when seems you've exhausted all options, my friend,
dispell your illusions and begin again.


© Copyright 2003 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
ice
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since 2003-05-17
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1 posted 2003-11-21 07:14 AM


Doc
A fine villanelle, rich in meter,flush in content....one that every poet should read.
Do you mind if I share this poem in my poetry chat room?...(of course giving you full credit and copyright honors)

______ice
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Dr.Moose1
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2 posted 2003-11-21 09:31 PM


ice,
Thanks. By all means feel free, however, personally, I don't think this is one of my better efforts. Your comments are too kind,
thanks again,
Doc

kayjay
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3 posted 2003-11-22 07:06 PM


Despite your comments to writer "Ice"
I find your thoughts here very nice.
Your rhyme and meter call the tune.
I'll write as well, I hope...and soon.

Nice job!  Ken J

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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4 posted 2003-11-22 08:32 PM


I echo Kayjay and Mr. Ice,
I found your villanelle oh so nice.
I couldn't do this if I tried,
Glad you did it to be my guide

Excellent job!

Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2003-11-23 07:30 PM


kayjay,
Thank you for you poetic reply, but, I'm still not that pleased with this,. There is something about this format that really challenges me. I can't quite put my finger(or pencil) on it yet, but, I will. Thanks again.
Doc
Mysteria,
Thanks, but, I find it hard to believe you could not do anything you set your mind to.
I'm not a total stranger to your writings,
and, would be interested to see the results.
Nan gives excellent advice on how to start,( although it made it so much easier for me, it almost seemed like cheating),however, best of luck, thanks again.
Doc

Essorant
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6 posted 2003-11-23 09:12 PM


Hi Dr.Moose,

I enjoyed your Villanelle.
It flowed well; and I like the message you impart with it.  Altogether very goodly timbered to my thinking.  A pleasure to read.

take care,
Essorant


[This message has been edited by Essorant (11-23-2003 10:10 PM).]

Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 2003-11-24 03:59 PM


Essorant,
Thanks for your kind comments, I'm glad you liked.
Doc

Nan
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8 posted 2003-12-05 08:37 AM


Doc Moose cheats?.. I didn't think you needed to do that...

I really enjoyed this, Doc - So we shouldn't give up the ship, eh?  Just look for another current to take us away to some unexplored land.. I'm in...

Thanks for this villanelle, kind sir - It's grand...

Dr.Moose1
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9 posted 2003-12-09 04:37 PM


Nan,
Cheat? Maybe. Give up the ship? No way Bucko!
Me timbers is shivered t' weather the storm! Hope ye did as well lassie. Thet Nor'easter I hears did level a mighty sweep at yer moorings, but I'll wager a months leave it'd take more than thet t' rattle yer pinions. AARRRG!
Doc

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