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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
When seems you've exhausted all options, my friend, the top of your form may be just 'round the bend. Dispell your illusions and begin again. There's much to be said for remembering when achieving your goals was still possible then, when seems you've exhausted all options, my friend. Seclusion, confusion, the list never ends, what seems insurmountable, factored by ten! Dispell your illusions and begin again. Your grief can't consume what's not offered, so, fend off all sorry feelings of pointlessness, mend, when seems you've exhausted all options, my friend. Herein lies the message I'm trying to send, "Old Saws" like "Old Tires" re-tread with a pen when seems you've exhausted all options, my friend, dispell your illusions and begin again. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Doc A fine villanelle, rich in meter,flush in content....one that every poet should read. Do you mind if I share this poem in my poetry chat room?...(of course giving you full credit and copyright honors) ______ice ><> |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
ice, Thanks. By all means feel free, however, personally, I don't think this is one of my better efforts. Your comments are too kind, thanks again, Doc |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Despite your comments to writer "Ice" I find your thoughts here very nice. Your rhyme and meter call the tune. I'll write as well, I hope...and soon. Nice job! Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I echo Kayjay and Mr. Ice, I found your villanelle oh so nice. I couldn't do this if I tried, Glad you did it to be my guide  Excellent job! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
kayjay, Thank you for you poetic reply, but, I'm still not that pleased with this,. There is something about this format that really challenges me. I can't quite put my finger(or pencil) on it yet, but, I will. Thanks again. Doc Mysteria, Thanks, but, I find it hard to believe you could not do anything you set your mind to. I'm not a total stranger to your writings, and, would be interested to see the results. Nan gives excellent advice on how to start,( although it made it so much easier for me, it almost seemed like cheating),however, best of luck, thanks again. Doc |
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Essorant Member Elite
since 2002-08-10
Posts 4769Regina, Saskatchewan; Canada |
Hi Dr.Moose, I enjoyed your Villanelle. It flowed well; and I like the message you impart with it. Altogether very goodly timbered to my thinking. A pleasure to read. take care, Essorant [This message has been edited by Essorant (11-23-2003 10:10 PM).] |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Essorant, Thanks for your kind comments, I'm glad you liked. Doc |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Doc Moose cheats?.. I didn't think you needed to do that...  I really enjoyed this, Doc - So we shouldn't give up the ship, eh? Just look for another current to take us away to some unexplored land.. I'm in... Thanks for this villanelle, kind sir - It's grand... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Nan, Cheat? Maybe. Give up the ship? No way Bucko! Me timbers is shivered t' weather the storm! Hope ye did as well lassie. Thet Nor'easter I hears did level a mighty sweep at yer moorings, but I'll wager a months leave it'd take more than thet t' rattle yer pinions. AARRRG! Doc |
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