The ice Queen(I edited this one)

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The ice Queen(I edited this one)

Wind

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since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

0 posted 2002-11-02 07:00 PM

Ice snakes in her hair
Blue eyes with cold and fury
Skin of ivory pearl
a gown of bitter cold stars
She is the only ice queen

Tammy Blessing
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since 2002-08-26

Posts 366
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1 posted 2002-11-04 07:47 AM

Hey Wind! I think this is a really GREAT tanka. I only have one problem with it. It's a bit hard to read the large print. It detracts from the beauty of the peice.
Tammy

Titia Geertman
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since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

2 posted 2002-11-04 05:54 PM

Same for me here, it's too BIG to read properly.

Make it a bit smaller en center it, it will look a lot nicer.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2002-11-11 06:58 PM

Let's see how it would look smaller...

quote:

Ice snakes in her hair
Blue eyes with cold and fury
Skin of ivory pearl
a gown of bitter cold stars
She is the only ice queen

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

4 posted 2002-11-11 08:13 PM

since I couldn't edit it.... I didn't mean for it to look so big... But I would have liked it a little more if it were slighly bigger than that Sunshine. It just makes it look so short and small.

"Sticks and stones will break my bones,
But words will break my heart"

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

5 posted 2002-11-13 09:46 PM

Excellent tanka! I'm sorry that you weren't able to edit it to your liking. It really is an apt picture in words.

Shenachie

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