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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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The tempest rages. A careless eye sees chaos, The astute, order. ------------------ Jim "If I rest, I rust." -Martin Luther |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I must first qualify (or disqualify, as you like it) my response by saying that I know absolutely zero about haiku other than syllable count. I hear there is some sort of philosophy about it. That being said, I really liked this one -- it made a powerful statement, which is quite an accomplishment for so few syllables. Applause! --Kess ------------------ You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is a very interesting Haiku...I like what you did with this. Although you speak of the eye as in the eye of the person seeing the storm, it can also bare refrence to the eye of the storm. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Absolutely beautiful! |
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