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SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

0 posted 2002-04-27 12:02 PM

Ok, I made my attempt at writing a Villanelle. Don't know if it is right or not. But, I tried. I don't know for sure where I am suppose to post it, so I will post it in "Open".

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

1 posted 2002-04-27 05:44 AM

Hi, Sue! Yes, Open is fine. I read it and you did quite a good job on it. You stuck to the structural rules of the villanelle quite admirably

You may want to change "I can bare" to "I can bear", unless you just like to be nekkid!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2002-04-27 02:17 PM

SuzieQ~
I will go back to Open and read your delightful Villanelle again ... it is very nicely done~

LOL ... keep your eyes peeled for that Balladeer ...
he 'knows' nekkid~ (and LOVES it !)

*HUGS*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

3 posted 2002-04-27 04:19 PM

I saw your Villanelle, it is beautiful

Great job Smartchick.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

4 posted 2002-04-27 06:06 PM

Thank you Balladeer for your nice reply. I don't think I do want to be nekkid, so I guess I better go back and change that "bare" to "bear".

Thanks for the warning, Marge. I'll go change thae word, rightnow. Thank you for your
reply.

As for you, Titia! You are a great teacher. Thank you for your reply.

You all are so encouraging

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

5 posted 2002-04-27 09:35 PM

Ok Balladeer! I fixed it. It now says "bear", instead of "bare". LOL

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

6 posted 2002-05-02 08:16 PM

Thanks for 'bearing' with me this month, Sue... I'll find your villanelle in Open and comment there as well... You actually can post both here and in Open - It's one of the exceptions to the rule...

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