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'Oh Mow Is Me " / " 'Till Comes The Frost " |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Invading hoard on spring-time's heels / A billion men to one against vast armies blazoned o' the green / Incessantly they grow more dense My saber sharp shall swath thy ranks / before the night-bird's heard to call with brutish force of a machine / I vow that I shall smite them all . " Off with their heads !" my battle cry / I charge full speed into the fray they fall beneath my blade in rows / no mercy shall be shown this day The yellow helmet officers / the toughest fighters of the lot gone sep'rate ways from head to toes / decapitated on the spot This war shall rage 'till Gen'ral White / once summoned from the land up north arrives in force to stem the tide / no more will I need venture forth I straddle ol' eleven horse / my armored steed and I both pray fire up the beast and ride , ride , ride , / to live to fight another day . I must protect the scenery / against these armies at all costs therefore ( ergo ) oh mow is me ! / ' till when has come the killing frost |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Have to get back to you Doc., but my first reaction was... ![]() ![]() Right now I have a major web crisis on my hands, which must be solved within a week. Just when I thought I was done! ![]() |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Sonnets a la Moose! Yeah! ![]() However, I do have some remarks. ![]() Although I can find nothing wrong with the line "before the night-bird's heard to call", I find it very difficult to pronounce this line without my tongue getting into a double knot. ![]() I feel I must protest against "ride, ride, ride"! No matter how often I read it, it always reads as "RIDE, RIDE, RIDE" and not once as "RIDE, ride, RIDE". No cheating in this class Doc.... ![]() ![]() Be careful with too many abbreviations though. Sometimes it feels as if you're forcing the meter into iambic. ![]() Other than that... I think you did an outstanding job! A challenge well met! ![]() After this, ballads will be a piece of cake! Would you like coffee or tea with that? ![]() |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Munda, I agree , and I agree , and I agree . Now that the four of us are in agreement , yes I'll take mine black . Doc P.S. Technically though , this was posted after your substitute term expired , so ... Nyah nyah , ny nyah nyah ! Doc |
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Lady in Red Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 147 |
Careful Doc., she may turn you into a Moose ballad! Tee hee... FYI, We've put terrashare.com out of business with our craziness. Therefore we have moved to a new host: http://stute.freeservers.com Now ride and tell the world about it! ![]() |
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