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A Real Non-Acrostic According To "The Rules" Pantoum (For Munda)
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Perhaps once more I'll try to pen the facts aside time and again to fool a few with care-free style but only for a little while The facts aside time and again more often guides what's said and when but only for a little while like raking words into a pile More often guides what's said and when on what is tried it will depend like raking words into a pile leaves room for fun there's no denial On what is tried it will depend the message that you hope to send leaves room for fun there's no denial but fool with rules and I'll stand trial The message that you hope to send it's back to school for me my friends but fool with rules and I'll stand trial by those that I've tried to make smile It's back to school for me my friends to fool a few with care-free style by those that I've tried to make smile perhaps once more I'll try to pen |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I like this...good work. You did nicely with the style. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Ahhhh...this is great Doc and "according to the rules"almost a Pantoum. (hehe) Your theme devellopes great (I love it!) and the repeating of the lines is correct too (even in the final stanza  ), but....LOL you're gonna hate me....your rhyme scheme should be A rhymes to A and B to B, etc., although I kinda like this variant. Perhaps we can call it "Pantoum a la Moose? Anyway, I loved it and admire your perseverance for trying and trying and... hehe.  Merry Christmas to you Doc.  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Munda, If you liked this one check out "On The Mend" ,and thanks sincerely , between us we've really stirred up this sleepy class . A very happy holly-days to you also. Doc P.S. I've still got a few days to get it right . |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I hereby proclaim Munda to be graduated from Pantoums 101... She's even mastered 201, I do believe... Sleepy??? We just need something new to dig into... Then again - We've got da Moose...  |
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