Variation on an Old Ballad

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Ted Reynolds
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since 1999-12-15

Posts 331

0 posted 2000-07-11 03:14 PM

There went three men a spacing,
And nothing did they see
But meteroic rubble
And asteroid debris.
      One said it was Lost Worlds,
      The other he said nay.
      The third said it was just fragments
      That had always been that way.

There went three men a spacing,
And nothing did they hear
But cosmic radiation
Muttering in their ear.
     One said it was Their Voices,
     The other he said no.
     The third said it was reflection
     Of the human libido.

There went three men a spacing,
And nothing did they taste
But some lonely atoms
In the eternal waste.
     One said they were a Message,
     The other he said nix.
     The third said it was an accident
     Of the elemental mix.

There went three men a spacing,
And nothing did they smell
But vacuum of infinity
With just a whiff of Hell.
     One said it was a Warning.
     The other he said nein.
     The third said this very thing had been
     Predicted by Einstein.

There went three men a spacing,
And nothing did they touch
But the outer edge of nothing
(And that didn't feel like much.)
     One said it was Creation,
     The other he said nope.
     The third said it was a function
     Of the asymptotic slope.

There go three men a spacing,
And nothing do they find,
But unanswered questions
On the rim of the undefined.
     One says it is The Mystery,
     The other he says nyet.
     The third says it's just problems
     That we haven't worked out yet.

Not A Poet
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since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

1 posted 2000-07-11 03:35 PM

Very nicely done, Ted. Now I'd like to hear it set to music and properly sung

Thanks,
Pete

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

2 posted 2000-07-12 09:12 AM

Ted...great poem. Please check your e-mail

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2000-07-15 11:11 AM

Let's see - I see a creative format - creative rhyme scheme - creative meter - very creative theme, indeed...

Ted, you're redefined the term "ballad"... This is an absolutely wonderful work - I enjoyed each and every verse as much as the last...

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

4 posted 2000-07-17 01:22 PM

Ted,
A marvellous poem indeed... I guess if Nan says this is good, I am sure it is ...

I hope to learn some of this writing soon...

gives so much pleasure to read, I can only imagine the pleasure of penning such a marvel...

regards,
sudhir

Munda
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since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

5 posted 2000-07-19 05:18 PM

Ted I liked this a lot ! Is it a ballad ? LOL I have no idea.....I found out there are more than just one rule for ballads.

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