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sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be

0 posted 2000-01-21 12:36 PM


Once bitten,
Twice shy
Seemed to be the motto
To describe my life.

I thought I was ugly,
Fat and so uncool
I was so depressed
I started to fail school

But when I saw you
A smile in your eyes
And a smile on your face
Promising no lies

But I was a fool
There were lots of trials
I began to think bad thoughts again
Despite your many smiles

But now those thoughts are gone
A smile is on my face
For I know that now..
Love has found it's place

this is a repost...this is the first one i wrote that I posted here..thought I'd give you another look at it...I also revised the last sentence..sounds better now.   Tell me what ya'll think!

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Oo0ostephanio0oO
Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~
1 posted 2000-01-21 05:27 PM


I liked this one alot. I have felt this way, but the smile has not yet returned. It's heart-breaking.


 (:***Stephani***:)
"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."



Jer
Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
USA
2 posted 2000-01-21 05:27 PM


This is a great insperational poem!  I remember reading it back in Dec. when you posted it.  Good job.
sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
3 posted 2000-01-24 09:44 AM


thanks to both of you for replying!  
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