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eagle Junior Member
since 1999-10-20
Posts 39singapore |
Only in places where bad things have happened, sometimes a kind of strange force lingers on like lonely pools of water after a storm; And now and then some of us fall into those pools. Then we remember the last time we touched and felt the warm tears stream down our cheeks. The echo's of that last good bye as two people parted amidst a crowd drifting on in different directions like fallen leaves in autumn. And it seems everytime I pass by that place, the traces of cotton in the velvet sky cascade towards the horizon like a red carpet leading on, only white with spots of blue. And something happens that opens the floodgates of the heart, and the churn of emotions, releases well kept tears which fall to the concrete ground and rises into the air to form another cloud , that leads further into the horizon. [This message has been edited by eagle (edited 01-08-2000).] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wow...Wonderful work. Your word transported me to a place I have not visited in a long time. This touched me deeply. the only suggestion I have is the presentation. I think this would work well in a centered presentation, if you ever publish it, have it written in a handwritten script. Bravo!! |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hey! That was really great! You really have talent! Good work! ~LoveBug |
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eagle Junior Member
since 1999-10-20
Posts 39singapore |
Many Thanks!  Will consider your suggestions.  |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very deep and very beautiful. I am truly impressed, to keep it up! *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
This soooooooooo ****ing dope!! I could real feel this poem!! Keep on doing what you doing!! Deano "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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