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pop_tart14
Junior Member
since 1999-11-22
Posts 12
North Dakota, USA

0 posted 1999-12-06 06:22 PM


This poem is for you.
And only you.
I want you to understand
What you mean to me.
I'll never hurt you.
I'll never leave you.
Only pain can cause this to happen.
You cause me pain.
Quite a lot.
Though not your fault,
It still hurts a lot.
I try to forget it
And let us move on.
It might be working
And I don't want to ruin it.
I want us to be
This happy forever.
Even possibly perfect one day.
When you're with me,
I never want to let you go.
But you always have to leave
And it makes me so sad.
Then I impatiently wait until
I can see you again.
You're one of the few
Who actually understand me.
I want to keep it this way
So I can always have you.
I hope one day,
I can be special to you
And never have to worry
About being alone.
I know you care
And I'm glad you do.
I hope you'll never leave.
Always be by my side.
Understand me forever,
And never stop loving me.
I'll do the same-
Just for you.

--I know this is really rough but I just wrote it really fast and gave it to my boyfriend because it showed exactly what I felt.  Please reply so I can have some opinions.  Thanks




 *the course of true love never did run smooth*
shakespere

© Copyright 1999 Amanda - All Rights Reserved
kari
Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104
Hyde Park, Ut, USA
1 posted 1999-12-06 06:46 PM


I am in the same vote as you.  I've never really been able to explain how mine and my bf's relationship is but you pretty much spelled a good part of it out.  Even though it was done quickly it is really good!
Jer
Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
USA
2 posted 1999-12-06 11:08 PM


Great poem! I know what you are saying in it. I hope that the person you gave it to was greatful and will cherish the words as well as feelings you poured onto that paper.  In all, great job.


Jeremy

JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
3 posted 1999-12-07 03:13 PM


You could make this great if you worked on it a little, but it is still good for a fast one.  Don't worry.  I do it all the time to express my emotions.
Oh, and I'm sure your boyfriend loved it!  

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