Like the flies upon the glass

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Teen Poetry #2

Like the flies upon the glass

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-11-23 07:11 PM

Like the flies upon the glass
Thirsty eyes are licking dust
Of ancient verses
Rusty words turn into gold
Brushing off the silver mold
As the time reverses

Lights won’t fade into the dark
Starting fire spark by spark
Sparkling on the page
And the pen begins to bleed
Planting slowly seed by seed
On the snowy range

Harvest, lined up into rows,
Quickly flourishes and grows
Not awaiting spring
Breaking calmly through the snow
My emotion starts to flow
Drowning in the ink

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 1999-11-23 09:43 PM

Very well done Master. I have to bump this back up!

Your rhyme scheme has me baffled though. You began rhyming the first, second. Then fourth, fifth. And third, sixth lines.

Then your schemed changed. The third and the sixth lines do not rhyme in the last 2 stanzas.

[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 11-23-1999).]

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