»
Archives
»
Teen Poetry #2
»
Cloak of Black
| Teen Poetry #2 |
|
Cloak of Black |
|
|
Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
** I tend to hide behind metaphors...i hide alot when i think about it. Anyway, I think this is one of the most fogged up poem, but also it's very clear (i don't know what i'm going on about). I'm just saying that I think it's very hard for someone (other than me) to understand this; so I'll appreaciate all replies. Flowery elaborate words, Fails to grip the brush Slips unnoticed across my Conscience. Dissipating into mist Evaporating under your wrath, Passion Remorse. Stripped bare Curl Hide Small as I can. Distant echoes of unnerving mystical Chimes of lapping waves Appear as sacred and legendary As heaven. Tears turn to stone Conscience grows wings. Fly away. Pleading energy Let free. "You could be my unintended Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse "Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith "Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs Several forms scurry to seek shelter Beneath her levitating shadow. Her back rigid , eyes glassy Gazes intently at time escaping Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles Through the hour glass, A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Lani_DarkOne - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Wow, I really liked this. I know what you mean it was hard to understand. But I noticed each line had something different to say about you. Great poem Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
||
|
TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Wow! IT's great, no wait...it's fantastic! "Distant echoes of unnerving mystical Chimes of lapping waves Appear as sacred and legendary As heaven." My favourite part of the poem, and I think I understand it. But I think, to every person, it will mean something else. Wonderful poem!! Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
||
|
Matchstick McGee Junior Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 26Austin, Texas |
I don't know whether or not I necessarily understood what it said about you, but the point, at least for me, is the way that it speaks to me. I tend to hide too, and this poem relates to me and describes my life in a way that few do. I will remember this one, please keep writing! -Matchstick |
||
|
Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
