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Teen Poetry #2

Inside of You

ILoveSrfrs
Member

since 1999-11-14

Posts 69
California

0 posted 2000-06-05 07:33 PM

<font face="Courier New, Arial, Verdana" color="#000080" size="2">I want to live in your mouth
Walk in the crevices of your perfect teeth
Falling on your soft tongue when I trip
And doing cartwheels once in a while

I'd go down your throat, careful not to hurt you...
The stomach sounds good.
Exploring the remains of what you devoured
Looking to see if my insides were there.

Where could I go next?
Maybe I would just float around in your blood
Shooing away the bad cells
Making you pure

I'd take a vein up to your heart and stay there a while
I've always wanted to be there, you know
Hear thump,thump,thump and know it was still alive
I wasn't sure for a minute there.

Then I'd go to your mind and look for hours
Reading your thoughts like a book
And holding on for dear life.

If you would only let me inside of you.
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[This message has been edited by ILoveSrfrs (edited 06-05-2000).]

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

1 posted 2000-06-05 07:53 PM

WOW! nice writing!!!!! I love the metaphors you use! It was very interesting and I must admit...I was very confused at the beginning. but it is very real and beautiful as is all writing that comes from the heart!!! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~

ILoveSrfrs
Member

since 1999-11-14

Posts 69
California

2 posted 2000-06-05 09:59 PM

thanks alot. any more replies??

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