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0 posted 2000-06-05 06:25 PM

Go and be with her!
My loving feelings you did deter
I'm tired of your S***
So no longer will I just sit
Don't think I'll always be here
Because I finally looked in the mirror
I can go and find someone else
You lied to me. Your feelings were false
You're not going to hurt me any more
It's time for me to pick my heart up off the floor
She can't be better than me
Why is it that you can't see?
But of course! why didn't I think of it before?
She'll give you her virginity...all that and more
I don't care you can have her!
Yes my dear, I can do better!
You took my heart and true feelings and ran
Now from my heart you are forever banned!
Don't come crawling back to me
You won't be getting any sympathy
I don't trust you any more
It seems you enjoyed watching my tears fall to the floor
I still love you yes it's true
But all you do is leave me sad and blue
So please just take yourself and make a better way
Because I feel the need to run away
So good bye, Good bye
You're no longer the twinkle in my eye.

© Copyright 2000 Jessica Lynn - All Rights Reserved
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
1 posted 2000-06-05 06:30 PM

If it's such a fragile love that it can find another so easily give up on it. I know it's difficult and I've felt it but longer you hold on to it , you ruin your life and happiness which will never be restored.


Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
2 posted 2000-06-06 03:54 AM

A_L is right, a love so one sided is something that if you don't let go (although time is the only cure)it will scar you for a long time, trust me.  Again, the attitude spewed from lines line a busted water main.  Can't wait till you find a you treats you right, then we'll get to all read the great things you can do with that intensity in a positive way... not to say that I don't enjoy what you have now.  just keep it all comin and you'll be fine.



since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
3 posted 2000-06-06 10:05 AM

It's a wonderful game that we played
Atleast I enjoyed the game
Me showing the maximum of love
You returning it with a sense of doubt

I guess the game ended when you moved to face the next round opponent
You gave a beautiful ending
I guess you're too good at it
You've beaten me in straight sets

I love you lady
I just love the way you played
Your elegance is too good
Your deceptive volleys makes you a sure winner

I guess you knew it from beginning to end
But I thought our love would never end
Still I'm trying to figure out was it all just a game
But now I've become well-versed in it you see

Not that I would play a game
But atleast I would understand if its all just a game


since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
4 posted 2000-06-06 10:06 AM

I just wrote a poem and post it wrongly. sorry for that.


Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
5 posted 2000-06-14 06:26 PM

Hey A_L sorry I didn't see that before! It is wonderfully written! I love the way your piece your words together to hold a deeper meaning! Keep up the writing! Love Always~*~Jessica Lynn~*~
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

6 posted 2000-06-15 10:33 AM

I've felt quite similar to the way you feel now. Without rehashing my screwed up life, lets just say that I think this is wonderfully written. You definately (sp?) expressed your feelings at the time which is always a good thing.


 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all."

It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence.

Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen.
I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
7 posted 2007-11-15 07:25 PM



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