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Lucius Cade
Member

since 2000-03-23

Posts 235
Saskatchewan

0 posted 2000-06-03 07:00 AM

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A lonely breath is taken
Despairing the dreaded morrow
A world decayed and shaken
Even at best, replete with sorrow

And in its darkest hours
Sitting withered in his place
An old man seethingly scours
Eyes fixed, on his untied bootlace

'Tis been one week since he took his seat
Nor food or water consumed
The scraps of his mind, those not deplete
Have convinced him, he is doomed

'Twas he who chose this tortured death
From this wretched earth exiled
But as his body takes its final breath
His face twists into a smile

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<font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> Lucidity is the answer to all problems</font>

[This message has been edited by Lucius Cade (edited 06-04-2000).]

Lani_DarkOne
Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 152
UK

1 posted 2000-06-03 09:44 AM

Very powerful...great poem!!

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

2 posted 2000-06-03 03:01 PM

WOW! Great writing! you have found every way possible to make people see beyond the words and into your heart. you have a wonderful writing style! Keep it up! I love reading your work! Love ~*~Jessica~*~

brendon2k
Junior Member

since 2000-05-11

Posts 38
none

3 posted 2000-06-04 03:15 PM

WOW! Jesse i loved this one, super powerful poem. Loved it, all around one of the best you/ve written yet.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

4 posted 2000-06-05 02:42 AM

This one the most creative ideas I've read since I've gotten on here. I really like reading yer stuff. Keep us all nurished.

Jeremy Halstead

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

5 posted 2000-06-05 04:18 PM

This is a great poem, full of emotion. Great style.

"But as his body takes it's final breath
his face twists into a smile"

That is my favourite part. That is how I would like to die, with a smile on my face.

Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach.

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