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Breaking Up |
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Ladybug16 Junior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 15Nacogdoches, TX 75964 |
This is a poem I wrote about breaking up with my boyfriend Andrew whom I still loved very much. I love you but it's time to go You took my heart you took my soul I gave you my life I gave you my all But you're making me stumble, you're making me fall. Please don't be upset, please don't fight Because in the end it will be alright You may be mad at me at first But understand this is not meant to hurt Know that I love you and I still care I think those feeling will always be there I'm gonna miss you, I'm gonna cry But it's time for us to say good-bye You'll thank me in the end, believe me I know But right now all you can think of is I'm letting go. You've made me happy, you've made me cry, Sometimes you kept me from wanting to die. Please never forget me, I'll always be there, Call me up if you have something to share. I don't know if I'll ever see you again, But know in my eyes we'll always be friends. [This message has been edited by Ladybug16 (edited 11-08-1999).] [This message has been edited by Ladybug16 (edited 11-09-1999).] |
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Laura Mitchell Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 76Cincinnati OH,45238 |
So touching. I really like this poem. You were willing to let something very dear to you go. |
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Lilli Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 21Melbourne, Australia |
That was really nice, now you've got me wondering if that's the way it was for my ex.. Hrmm..I don't think it was, *giggle* he had someone new by the end of the week  Well done, it was nicely written. ------------------ There's a pretty girl on the face of the magazine What I see is my dirty hands turning the page |
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JJ New Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 6AZ |
I know what you're going through. My last boyfriend did the same thing to me and we are now "just friends". Read my poem Goos Bye KIss and feel better! |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
That was a really good explanation of breaking up and how hard it is. Can I ask why you broke up with him? It seems like you didn't want to but you made yourself for some reason. What was it? Nicely done!! |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
kari beat me to it.....this poem needs one thing to be complete...a motive...the reader is just left wondering.......WHY? ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Ladybug16 Junior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 15Nacogdoches, TX 75964 |
Long story. I wasn't supposed to be dating him because he was into anything and everything, so when my parents found out we were going out, I really didn't have a choice but to break up with him. We were going through some problems anyway, and I was realizing that it was wrong for us to be together even though I did still love him. Should I try to put all that in the poem??? |
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chollagrl4 Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 65brick |
this is a really good poem and i can relate to it a lot. Good job |
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Laura Mitchell Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 76Cincinnati OH,45238 |
Yea, you should probably try to include at least some of that in you poem. It kind of leaves the reader hanging, but sometimes that can be good. I'll leave it up to you. |
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Ladybug16 Junior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 15Nacogdoches, TX 75964 |
I'll try to put the story in it. It'll be hard because I wrote it about a year ago right before we broke up and I had all sorts of emotions running through me. Since we've been broken up for a year, it'll be difficult going back. Although I did just have some recent dealings with him that were hard, so I'll just go back with that. Should I just write a separate poem about why??? |
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Laura Mitchell Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 76Cincinnati OH,45238 |
Sure, that would be good! |
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