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the cry of an outcast
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the cry of an outcast |
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Seysi New Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 8kortrijk in belgium |
I don't think this one is as good as 'if i would die' but i wrote this one many years before... it's worth a try, you never know... the cry of an outcast when you are an outcast no one is to trust every word can be your last the scars never heal don't look at them no one is for real when you are an outcast your wish is to die please, let me die fast |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Seysi- Very unique meter you've used here. It confused me at first, but after another read I've decided that I like it very much. The words and topics are a bit disjointed, but the meter is hard to beat. Keep writing... ...Daysleeper... "Presently I've had enough of all your sanity." -James Kavanaugh |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
~~nice writing Seysi~~ Lots of expression in this one. Hope it's not reality for you. dh |
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brendon2k Junior Member
since 2000-05-11
Posts 38none |
Very well put together, very direct and unique. Overall i enjoyed it very much |
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