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Farrah
New Member

since 2000-04-26

Posts 3

0 posted 2000-04-26 09:26 PM

<font face="Comic Sans MS, Arial, Verdana" color="#2f2f4f" size="2">Tears Tears he cries them at night maybe because no one loves him alright he thought he was bad but he lost the only love he had now he is mad

He broke my heart once and my best friends twice but it came back on him hard now he sits all alone

I look at him at school now whos cool but he was such a fool

When I look in his eyes I see he wants to cry but he will try to deny because he has always been like that, that's why I can't take him back

I try to stay away from him but I can't so it starts to begain I took him back once more and now my heart has been torn

He told me he had changed so I really thought he had well I did till this very night now I'm in the hospital I guess love is blind so I wrote this Tears Tears I cry them at night mainly because I died this very night
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rachella
Junior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 39
Indiana

1 posted 2000-04-26 10:05 PM

Welcome to Passions! This is a good first post. I can't wait to read more.
~Rachella

son of man
Member

since 2000-04-25

Posts 125

2 posted 2000-04-26 10:25 PM

touching poem. real and clearly stated with lots of interesting rhyme. try a better format next time, though so the seperate thoughts dont collide with each other and cause a reader to have to back up and read it again. i enjoyed this work.

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

3 posted 2000-04-26 11:05 PM

Welcome to passions! This is indeed a heartfelt, wonderful first post. I too recommend you break up your lines however, to make it easier reading. Keep up the good work though!

*Krista Knutson*

As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins.
~*Albert Schweitzer*~

Danny Holloway
Member Elite

since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

4 posted 2000-04-27 10:27 AM

Farrah, keep em comin, your style will improve in time.
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since 1999-05-26

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Hurricane Alley

5 posted 2000-05-02 01:19 AM

Welcome to the family! I like this but do think the poem would be easier to read if it was formatted.

Karen
Junior Member

since 2000-04-30

Posts 36
Utah

6 posted 2000-05-02 10:32 PM

funny how we seem to go back to them no matter how bad they hurt us. I like your style.

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