Teen Poetry #2 |
Scalding Panic |
Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Scalding Panic She twines her hair in her fingers, Biting her cheek ‘till it bleeds. Eyes flit nervously, And although there is nothing, It all seems too much. Her panic boils over, Scalding all around her, As she runs screaming from the room. ~Lynne~ |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Extremely vivid description of fear...I think it's excellent! All of your poetry that I have read so far has been great!! Keep posting! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, a great way to capture such an overcoming emotion. Intense imagery...well done! *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hey, thank you both.. I was kinda hoping for a few more replies here, ppl!! ^_^ Yeah, this poem is kinda about the fear ppl have.. if they are claustophobic.. or sociophobic.. almost.. ^_^ Lynne |
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Blue Rose Junior Member
since 2000-04-20
Posts 18Vernonia OR USA |
How did you think that one up? Every one feels fear, but it seems so hard to describe, you did it better than I could! Oh, by the way, I'm new here. My name is Blue Rose. Keep up the good work! |
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natalie Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 56 |
I read this poem, because I read a reply you wrote earlier where you said that true beauty lies inside, and you're so right, so I was very curious to read some of your work,and it's really good, how you could describe this, very well done, natalie... |
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natalie Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 56 |
I read this poem, because I read a reply you wrote earlier where you said that true beauty lies inside, and you're so right, so I was very curious to read some of your work,and it's really good, how you could describe this, very well done, natalie... |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
thanx, *smiles* natalie.. thanks.. (I must say, i don't believe this is my best, at all.. hehe) well, I like to read your poetry too.. welcome blue rose, I'm glad u like it.. Lynne |
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**Angel** Member
since 2000-03-31
Posts 162 |
The expression in this poem is wonderful. I really enjoyed it! Lindsay |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank u Lindsay.. hehe, u really r an angel.. Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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