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Wish to be free (first poem I ever wrote)
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Wish to be free (first poem I ever wrote) |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This is my very first poem that I have ever written. I didn't even know that I still had it until I stumbled across it about 2 minutes ago. Here it is. ~AF~ Have you ever wondered, What the world would look like. If you were miles and miles away, A dove on an enchanting ride, Floating far over the ocean. To be a star in the biggest business, With glamour and fame all in your hands. But all these things will never be for you, Seeing the same four walls and barely staying alive, Is all that matters. Your only friend is your candle light, That burns and flickers so bright. Butter and bread are almost as bad, As the daily beatings that swell your head. How much you would wish to be free. [This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 04-10-2000).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Neat first poem! How old were you when you wrote it? Love and hugs, Lizzie. "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is a rainbow of delight." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
I was 12 when I wrote it Lizzy. Not exactly what I would call a poetic acomplishment though...LOL ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
The beauty of our early works is we can look back and see how far we have come. We can also take the theme of the poem and create a poem with more strength. You have a very important theme in this piece and crafting this into something powerful could help many people. Thanks for sharing.  |
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Thomas Jono Junior Member
since 2000-03-30
Posts 25 |
this is a good poem...how long did it take you to write this??it is a poetic accomplishment if you published this piece in passions...this poems could help ppl with their own work and also myself...thanks so much for sharing this with us...hope to see other of your work... from Thomas Jono |
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natalie Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 56 |
I think everybody feels about his first poem very emotional, it is something special, so is yours, natalie... |
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