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Heart break |
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SwEEt&iNnOcCeNt Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 45 |
"what is love, how do you know your love is true for your love and if your love loves you back, or just one day your love makes you loose all faith and make you look like a fool, love is a game for two, you win during the begining so to be believed, suppose you loose at the end, and when everything ends it is just you and the dark nights with the full moon glittering on two tear drops floating down your eyes and the cold lonely nites that will come until you are healed from the wounds that have been caused and greatly damaged,reminding you all of the great memories when you had when you were with your love when you both were huddled under the nite sky" |
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Comfrey83 Junior Member
since 2000-04-02
Posts 36Winchester, Mass USA |
you did something really well here, you wrote the poem in a format that really gave the reader that racing thoughts essence that is all too common in love. that was very well done. fantastic job, really! -Andy |
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SwEEt&iNnOcCeNt Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 45 |
Thank you Andy |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Very interesting format! I agree with Comfrey that it looks like racing thoughts. A little difficult to follow though. Love and hugs, Lizzie  |
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