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The firebird.
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The firebird. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa 
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(This poem doesn't really do it for me, I dunno why. I also think it is too long but please give me your opinions.) With his feather red as the sunset, shining like gold, he flies gracefully in the skies for everyone to behold In all of the world none bird had such beauty. He tried to rid the world of evil, cause, he believed, it was his duty. All the animals loved him cause they knew about them he cared, and whenever they needed him he always was there. But the had come after 500 years. All the animals, so sad, as they shed thier tears. He had to leave, he had no choise. He started to sing a song with the most beautiful voice. His sad, wailing song echoed through the land. Animals' eyes filled with questions as they reached out for a hand. He looked at them through watery eyes, his song even sader now as he set for the skies. He couldn't look back, he didn't dare. All this sadness to him wasn't fare. He reached the top of a hill where himself he burned. With one last, sad note to ashes and dust he turned. All the worl was quiet, all of them grieved. Some anilmals died of sadness, others found it hard to believe. Suddenly the earth shook and the wind started to blow, and from his father's ashes arrived the new bird, with a greater glow. With bewonderd eyes the animals stared, while he wiped away thier tears to show that he cared. Like this firebird we must rise from our pain and hurt. We must go on, stay strong, and never treat others like durt. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
I'm not sure I understand this...is the firebird a metaphor of sorts? Could you please explain? ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
OK, I'll try my best to explain. The phoenix, or firebird like I called it, is a mythological bird that consumed itself by fire after 500 years, and rose renewed from its ashes, and I base my poem on this myth. But a phoenix can also be a person or thing that has been restored to a new existence from destruction, downfall or ruin. It can also symbolized Jesus rising from the dead. In my poem, I will say that the poenix is a person, who tried his best to be there for everyone, and was loved my everyone, but this person had a great sadness inside. He was hurting so much, that this person died, not litterly though. But from all of this sadness, pain and frustration, he rose to be a better and stronger person. OK...so I think that is what it's about. Hope it will do. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
I see- very nice.  ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Maitay Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158Sisters,OR,USA |
That was a really cool poem, I never knew taht myth, but for me that does sort of work as using it for a metaphore of Jesus. I think it's a wonderful poem, and that you should be proud of it. ------------------ ~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~ ~Maitay Mirabel Litton~ |
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