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**Angel**
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0 posted 2000-03-31 02:04 PM



There's a little man and the rest of his evil clan
They live in my heart and cause me pain -this little man and his evil clan
When I give my heart to him they know it won't last -this little man and his evil clan
So they begin to do their heinous work - this little man and his evil clan
They poke and they prod, they are reckless with my heart
It brings tears to my eyes, and hurts me so - this little man and his evil clan
I call it a little man - but everyone knows who it really is
You are the heinous man and your little friends are your evil clan

© Copyright 2000 **Angel** - All Rights Reserved
Lucius Cade
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since 2000-03-23
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1 posted 2000-03-31 02:24 PM


Nice interpretation. Great poem, keep up the good work.
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Danny Holloway
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2 posted 2000-03-31 02:49 PM


Angel, you convey well what your heart feels.
Keep control of your heart, away from the man and his clan.
Nice work

ESP
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3 posted 2000-03-31 04:40 PM


This is a really good poem. I hope you manage to steer clear of this little man and his clan. Just be strong in the face of his evil.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


**Angel**
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4 posted 2000-03-31 07:13 PM


Thank you so much! I really love this place. It is incredible. You guys have been very supportive and I thank you so much for that.

-Lindsay

heart_on_sleeve
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5 posted 2000-03-31 07:18 PM


Awsome peice you have written here.Maby someday the little man and his evil clan will be defeated by your strong passion in poetry.
   Keep up this awsome work!
               Heart_on_sleeve

4eva_at_heart
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since 2000-02-12
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6 posted 2000-03-31 09:50 PM


this is excelent!!
great intepretation of the pain caused by another

smile and the days seem warmer

Bec

bulletproof2312
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7 posted 2000-03-31 10:42 PM


I absolutely love this poem! I like the repitition, it kinda makes it erie in a way (of course when you're weird like me alot of things are erie...) anyway, wonderful poem..*Smile On*  
---Skye


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dazed
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since 2000-03-13
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8 posted 2000-03-31 10:49 PM


Great poem Angel!!!
I like the the rhythm and the syaing in it heheheh cute!!!
Dana  8o)

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