|Teen Poetry #2
|When will I see my God
since 2000-01-26Posts 336
omaha ark usa
Here I lay on this day
Tired of what I see
I see the moon over the horizen
I see the sun teasing me.
This day God made for me and everyone else.
So I sit here wondering when will I see the one that made the earth his footstoole.
The creator of the heavens and the earth the very same one where we have used for many genrations.
I want to feel his love apon me I want to feel his warm touch when I get close to him.
When will I see my God in his glory.
This is my question and my devotation
For when day turn to night I am still there
The fallen angel jytree
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since 2000-03-25Posts 49
united states of america
well, i'm really not sure how to critique this work on the basis of verse due to its somewhat eclectic nature. i will say, however, that i like the first 4 lines the best. this is a very interesting piece that you've composed and despite a number of spelling and punctuation errors, i feel that it's well-written. i have to say, though being of the Christian faith, i have never had the urgent longing to go to Heaven. i HAVE, however, long desired to see the face of God where i stand now. much like moses did, or elijah. of which glory does this work speak? the glory to come or the glory that is now revealed for the fervent and devout seeker?
the beautiful freak
since 2000-01-25Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
Powerful poem. I liked the original layout!
since 2000-01-13Posts 528
I loved your poem, it was so wonderful. You spoke to my soul thhrough this. I really think this is one of your best. Be cool!
*There is no destination where we are
Please take me somewhere far
Far away from this world of mine*
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