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since 2000-03-21
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0 posted 2000-03-21 01:30 AM

Debbie Debbie I love you so
I wish there were someway that you could know
I wish I did not have to keep all this loneliness within me-
I wish I could show this to you and let you see.
But this sadness and hurt I must keep
Alone at night I shall weep.
Things happen I guess
I always seem to turn stuff into a mess.
When was it that I failed?
When was it that I wasn't there to your avail? I wish things could be like the way they were-
Back in the summer when I used to matter.
One year almost I can't believe
Has it been that long, how could you leave?
I messed up I know.
Now I'm left out in the
I should have thought things through 4 months ago Instead of ending here by myself sighing over my woes.
I wish I could have done more for you
I wish I wasn't such a worthless fool.
We used to be so happy though
How can it have changed so fast?!!
I thought you said this would forever last.
I guess it's my fault
I guess I could not provide you with what you sought.
I am ashamed at how weak I was
So worthless and completely useless.
Well I'll have to say I think I see why you would stop loving me-
I can not provide like he.
I wish I could let you know how I feel Debbie,
But *sigh, These days you are so far away from me....

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since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
1 posted 2000-03-21 09:53 AM

Cute poem.  
I'm sorry to hear about Debbie~
well, if it is a true poem from the heart.
Keep up the good work.
~Kristi Lynn

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since 2000-03-09
Posts 522
Missouri, USA
2 posted 2000-03-22 08:21 AM

nice poem, somehow you take a very sad subject and keept it from becoming so very depressing like many of them that deal with this do. Welcome to passions, I hope you enjoy your stay.

 "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." I am lost in my own mind.

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since 2000-03-21
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3 posted 2000-03-24 12:37 PM

thanks for you comments... really appreciate it =)
Junior Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 13
Northern California
4 posted 2000-03-24 02:33 AM

welcome to passions! your poem is great. hope things work out with you and debbie. later.     
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