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when an angel cries
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when an angel cries |
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angel1004 New Member
since 1999-10-24
Posts 8madison,tn usa |
it's gloomy a dark rainy day just sitting here what more can i say? it rains and rains and i know why someone made an angel cry the angel weeps full of sorrow and pain she screams with anger the thunder exceeding the rain someone hurt her told her lies now they made tears escape from her eyes crushed heart and broken dreams life isn't always what it seems she keeps her feeling deep inside nowhere to run and nowhere to hide no one can help this angel an angel in distress an eternity of hell her entir life a mess crying with pain and sorrow only looking forward to tomorrow surely a better day will come along things will go right not always wrong it rains and rains and i know why someone....someone made an angel cry it thunders and thunders can't you see an angel is crying and that angel.... is me |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
this was very good... a lot of emotion... nice rhythm keep up the good work  ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Maitay Member
since 1999-07-16
Posts 158Sisters,OR,USA |
Normally I dont reply like this, but would you mind if I used this poem as a song to maybe sing for my school. just the chior class, but I really loved this peom and it amkes for a perfect song... just email me at fairyfire@angelfire.com... thanks... great job.. ------------------ ~The price of finding love is to eventually lose it. When I wish on a falling star, I wish not for material goods but to show kindness to others and be content with what the world may offer me~ ~Maitay Mirabel Litton~ |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
*sob* i have to admit that i was almost in tears while reading this poem because it sounded exactly how i feel...i love it! keep em coming! ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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Looking-glass Junior Member
since 1999-10-26
Posts 10Singapore |
Very nice. The poem flows very well with the perfect rhyming. You have a talent in writing ^_^ ======================= God created the world tomorrow Life is nothing but memories |
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angel1004 New Member
since 1999-10-24
Posts 8madison,tn usa |
thank you everyone for the comments. i put alot of emotion into this and i was hoping for good feedback. thank you all! |
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Poetic Dreams Junior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 23Lindsa, OKlahoma United States |
This is very very sweet and deep. I also think it would be a beautiful song like she said. Keep them comin and keep strong. ------------------ ~Once it is said it can't be forgotten, but can always be forgiven~ |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
This is indeed a wonderful poem...I can't say it describes me-I am no angel....but good work. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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BraTt Junior Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 41Yakima, WA United States |
Wow, I really liked your poem. I wish I could write that good. That totally expressed how I was feeling, and I was also in tears, when I was reading this. I think this song would make a beautiful song. Keep up the good work. |
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Olga Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 152Brooklyn, NY, USA |
This is a great poem, I know you're hurting, and I know what its like. The only advice I can give to you is not to give up, and whatever or whoever made you cry is not worth your tears. One of my friends told me a wonderful qoute once, "A person who mad you cry, is not worth your tears. And a person who's worth your tears, will not make you cry." Take my friends advice. --------------------------------------------- "You have to kiss a lot of frogs, before you find your prince." |
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PoeticDreams Junior Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 35Lindsay,Oklahoma US |
good job very nice [This message has been edited by PoeticDreams (edited 12-28-1999).] |
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Leigh Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 20 |
Wow! That is all I can say. That was wonderful. You should definately keep writing! Never stop. Your poem was great! |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
my heart throbs 4 u as well as all others who have lost some1. don't cry it'll all b ok i loved the poem, it had great rhythm. keep up the good work. *Evry1's heart gets broken, beware those who never pic up the pieces. *It is better 2 have loved and lost than 2 hav never loved at all. so long nicnac |
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