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Please Don't Hurt Me Any More!
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Please Don't Hurt Me Any More! |
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Gadget28 Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 33Miami, Florida United States |
I made this poem both for my father and a boyfriend I had, they were both very abusive, I love my father very much, but we were never able to see eye-to-eye, even though I forgave him for all he did, I will never forget, as for my "boyfriend," well, I sent him to hell with this very poem! Please Don't Hurt Me Any More! Please don't hurt me any more, Can't you see my pain? These tears reflect my agony, And it's driving me insane. I thought you said you loved me, But how can it be true? When all you do is scream at me, And leave me black and blue? Please don't hurt me any more, You're tearing me apart, I can't forget the names you've called me, I know them all by heart. You've done to me so many things, Things I can't forget, Yet there you are, just sitting there, Smiling without regret. Please don't hurt me any more, I beg you, please, just try, There are people all around us, I don't want them to see me cry! Please don't hurt me any more, You're mad, I understand, I'm sorry the day had not turned out, The way that you had planned. I know I'm not as strong as you, I'm nearly half your size, So why do you keep hurting me, As if you'll win the Nobel prize? Please don't hurt me any more Just say that you will try, And I'll forgive you if I can, Before I say good bye. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This is a sad poem, but well written. Good rhyme and structure! I do hope that life is better for you. Definitely, too much abuse there. If you want someone to talk to, feel free to e-mail me. I have a daughter myself and she is my life and my treasure. Best of luck..... Danny |
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sunshine17 Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 89Bonduel, WI USA |
i like your poem. i think it shows people that stuff like that happens all the time at any age. |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I really liked your poem, and even though everthing hasn't gone well, remember that there is going to be that right someone who will treat you right and not hurt you like that. I pray you'll find that special angel soon... Welcome to Passions, congrats on a wonderful first post, and I hope you can see that Passions is always a place you can turn to. If you ever need to talk, please e-mail me at [email protected]. I'm willing to listen, I promise... ~Kristi Lynn  |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
I, myself have been in an abusive relationship, it was rought, but i should have seen taht he was possessive when he was worried about how close me and my father are "In a secret, I lIve, InvIsIble to all" -Me :) |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
This is so sad......I hope you got everything figured out. The poem was great anyhow. I like the rhyme in it. Very nice, but I'm sorry about what happened to you. I can't say I can relate, but it sounds awful and your poem expresses that. Keep smilin'  Salma "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders." |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
i dug it yo, i grew up with an abusive dad so i can relate, i as you forgave him of everything, so i can relate a bit, as far the boyfriend part, i've never had one of those nor do i want one |
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Gadget28 Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 33Miami, Florida United States |
Hey, guys, it's me again! Thanks for your sympathy! Actually, I'm still living with my parents, and it's kinda hard but I try to cope sometimes by reading a book or something, I really don't have many friends, since my father withdrew me from school, (because he said it was a waste of time, because I wouldn't amount to anything, anyways  )and I can't really go out with out my parents knowign exactly who the guy or girl is, it sucks, I know, expecially when I'm already 18! I would really appreciate it if you guys can E-mail me!Rich-pa: Are you sure you don't want a boyfriend? j/k  |
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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA |
That was an awesome poem. It was really heartfelt. My stepfather was abusive to me until I we boxed one day and I took him down. I sorry you had to go through all that you have. No one deserves that. I hope you find someone who treats you the way that you should be treated. With respect. Again, an awesome poem. Trevor If you want to walk with God, you've got to go His way! |
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rich-pa Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 317New Orleans, Louisiana |
i'm sure gadget |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
This is a very sad poem, but very well written. I hope everything is going down a better road for you. Chin up, sweetie, and please try to stay strong. Don't forget that there is always help out there. If you ever need someone to talk to, feel free to e-mail me: [email protected]. I have never been a victim, but I witnessed too much when I was little. My father beat my mother. He was also an alcoholic. But, anyway...very good poem. : (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Ah! I commend you on the strength it took to write this poem! I volunteer at a home for abused women and children, and the most difficult thing for them to do is to express their pain and fear. However, you have passed to me an ingenious idea as to how to help them express themselves..(poetry, of course..why didn't I think of that before?! :.) ) As for the content of the poem - you conveyed the pain and mistrust beautifully, using language that was easily understandable. I am especially fond of your last 2 lines....... Good work, and keep your chin up! Vreni p.s. If you need some open ears and an open mind, you can email me. (my e address is in my profile!) Ta ta! |
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Sara Junior Member
since 2000-02-24
Posts 27LaCrosse WI, United States |
I am crying right now. I have had so many friends who have been beaten by boyfriends. One was so bad (he even hit me once) that I called the cops and testified against him to put him in jail. I love this poem, very emotional, it hits close to home with me. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
WOW this is a powerful poem. I really like it. It has so much depth and description. Very well written. Well done. ~AF~ |
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Gadget28 Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 33Miami, Florida United States |
Thank yous to everyone who has replied to my poem, I never expected to get so much attention, thanks! Sara: Sweety, don't cry , I didn't mean to post this poem to make you cry, I wanted all those girls who are being battered to open their eyes and realize it's never too late! I commend you for calling the cops, if only I had true friends like you, but what can I say? It's been a lonely world for me! I also wanted to inform you out there that, yes, I have been beaten and abused, but I don't live everyday thinking and poutting about it, my life is totally normal! I have never and never will feel sorry for myself, this just has shown me how strong I can be! I thought I'd let this out, since some guys get scared away when they find out this side of my life, they think I'll have mental problems or something as a result of it, but I don't, I don't allow my past to interfere with my present and future! Thank you! |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Sorry for not responding right away to yer poem Gadget I see you found the one I wrote in response to this one before I got around to responding to yours This poem triggered a flood of old memories when I first read it, and I had to quit everything I was doing and get it all on paper before I forgot it again. Anyone who is interested in seeing it it is posted here: /pip/Forum31/HTML/000908.html This is a really great poem gadget, I hope you overcome this hardship in your life. |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Gadget, I was deeply saddened to hear about the abuse that you've had to deal with. No one deserves that. As for the poem...it was beautifully written, I could almost feel your pain. If you ever need to talk...please feel free to email me! [email protected]. Until then...keep your chin up and keep on writing! ~Sarah |
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Angela16 Junior Member
since 1999-11-19
Posts 37USA |
This is a sad poem, but you did write it really well. Good job! Angela |
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faith Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 89 |
Wow that was really very beautifuly written But it is kinda sad!To think u have been thru all that!  But don worry AS THEY say THIS TOO SHALL PASS we are all with u ! faith[This message has been edited by faith (edited 02-25-2000).] |
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