navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #2 » Needs
Teen Poetry #2
Post A Reply Post New Topic Needs Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797

0 posted 2000-02-05 12:55 PM

There was a girl,
No older than 14.
Only ever thinking about,
What a horrid day had been.

She wanted to come home,
To a calm and peaceful place.
But when she opened up the door,
Twas thrown back in her face.

She tried to tell someone,
About the dreadful day.
But no one wanted to hear,
What she had to say.

So she snuck into the kitchen,
And took a butchers knife.
She finally came to a conculsion,
To end her youthful life.

Slowly she began to slice,
Her tiny little arm.
Realising what she was doing,
She stopped it in alarm.

The flow of tears came,
And they ran down her cheek.
Why oh why she wondered,
Was her life so very bleak.

Finally after a while,
The tears came to an end.
What she needed right now,
Was just a simple friend.

Her brother came into the room,
And saw her sitting there.
He hugged her and whispered,
You know I'll always care.

Unfortunalty this poem has the element of truth in it. I have had to deal with this for sometime and writing it was the best way to let the demons go. If it is too morbid I will take it off.

© Copyright 2000 Elizabeth Johnson - All Rights Reserved
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271

1 posted 2000-02-05 01:05 AM

i really like this poem,
the best part was the second stanza,
though i am very sorry that you have had to deal with those things, this poem shows what it takes to stop someone from doing the extream, just to have someone who cares,  
the words spoke to me sorta, i've not had quiet those experiences but the feeling of the poem is all to real,  
very nicely done


"If there is anything the nonconformist hates worse than a conformist it's another nonconformist who doesn't conform to the prevailing standards of nonconformity."


Don't look... you might see.
Don't listen... you might hear.
Don't think... you might learn.
Don't walk... you might stumble.
Don't run... you might fall.
Don't make a decision... you might be wrong.
Don't might die.


since 2000-01-24
Posts 67
el paso
2 posted 2000-02-05 01:18 AM

this poem is so real, I hope you work through all your problems and never give up hope. Whether or not you know it, theres always someone who cares.

 Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love.

since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
3 posted 2000-02-05 12:15 PM

This was a very good poem.  I'm sorry that it has to come from those feelings.  Like Smore said, jsut remember, there's always someone out there who cares.  If you ever need to talk, please, email me!  I myself have had to deal with this, and I've helped some of my friends as well!  

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #2 » Needs

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary