Teen Poetry #2 |
Confrontation |
The Haunted Poet Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37Sumner Washington |
Confrontation My thoughts started twisting I couldn't think straight I soon started wishing I wasn't full of hate There's a demon in me One I can't escape I didn't want it to be For now I am full of hate It twists all my thoughts And alters my mind It calls all the shots And doesn't seem to mind I try to confront him But he always eludes me His morals are thin But his hatred is deep I then decided I've had enough I layed in bed and I tried To kill this demon but he is tough For he was determined not to die He threw his tricks at me But I saw right through them He realized this and ran deep Into a trap I laid for him I had this demon trapped And he knew that I did Then he smiled and tapped Upon the glass that I hid It all came crashing down My whole thought out plan I saw him start to frown And then I was in his land He finally dared to confront me The one he sought to destroy I knew at once he wanted it to be His final grand reward I fell to my knees And held my head in pain He started to tease Staring at me in disdain I finally saw him for what he really was I knew it couldn't be I started to scream in horror because The demon turned out to be me I saw all the lies and false hopes My determination was utterly shattered I knew I wouldn't be able to cope For my beleif in myself was battered Then I realized the facts The way to stop the pain The demon froze in his tracks As I looked at him in disdain I took three confident steps Until I was right in front of him The demon started to fret For his lies were killed by foreign love I then embraced this creature For this demon was no longer thriving I had finally learned to cope For now my faith was no longer dying I had help in fighting this demon From two beautiful girls But I'm afraid the price wasn't even For now one hates me still I will now try to get her back We were once good friends For I guess this demon had a secret attack It seems that he has gotten his revenge |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
haunted poet: this is excellent work... i love the way the story develops and the twist that you give it... i wrote a poem with a similar theme once called "Dreams of a Fallen Earth" in which i turn out to be a "demon"... mabye i'll post it here in the future so we can compare *heh*... i think you've done a great job with this and i'm not going to pick at it because i think it's pretty solid as it stands... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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The Haunted Poet Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37Sumner Washington |
Thanks! I'll be looking forward to reading yours if you post it! |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
I rather like this poem, I can relate to it, in a way, just switching around the genders, of course. But otherwise, lovely poem and much enjoyed. Now, can someone tell me how people just seem to gather people for responses so quickly? Is it because of the magic in the words? Yes...[and now I think I know why I hardly ever get responses]. Nevertheless, me like the poem. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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The Haunted Poet Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37Sumner Washington |
Just thought I'd reply so it could be reposted!!! Please respond! |
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