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since 2000-01-30
Posts 15

0 posted 2000-01-30 11:07 PM

One Mistake ruined it all
That great friendship that we had
Was soon about to fall
We moved too fast
And forgot to think
We both knew it wouldn't last
We were best friends
That got too close
too quick
we didn't think
Before we acted
and ruined something great
But it is all over now
we are not what we used to be
not nearly that way at all
But each day we move
a little closer
thank god I thought I lost you
But you came back
I Knew you would
but no the way I wanted you
I know deep in my heart
That I do love you
but I know you don't feel that same
But all I can do
Is wish and pray
for that day
that you will come back to me.....

This is my first poem so I don't know how good it is......

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since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
1 posted 2000-01-30 11:31 PM

Welcome to Passions!  I like the poem and if this is your first, it seems we're in for a lot of good poetry as soon as you write more.  Lovely poem.


 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."

since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
2 posted 2000-01-30 11:32 PM

For a first poem this was pretty good!     I know how you's hard when you have feelings for your best friend.  Can't wait to hear more from you!!

since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
3 posted 2000-01-30 11:45 PM

Welcome to Passion!  The is a great first post. I know so weel of the love you speak of!
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-01-31 09:06 AM

Welcome to Passions! Seems to me you are dealing well with this situation and it is working out. I congratulate you for that. This is a good first poem and we willbe looking forward to seeing more from you. If you need any help or would like a critique of your work just ask. The poets here are great and will give you any help you need.

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