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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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Sitting in a bar, staring at the wall When I was only three feet tall Sitting on that stool, staring at the wall Watching daddy have a ball. Finished school and went to work; Gardner, painter, office clerk But, even then, when on my climb I always seemed to find some time...for Sitting in a bar, staring at the wall A drink or two don't hurt at all Sitting on that stool, staring at the wall Drinking courage to meet Life's call. The business grew. The business failed. Health grew short. Skin wrinkled and paled. A marriage came. A marriage went. Just couldn't believe the time I spent Sitting in a bar, staring at the wall An occasional fling. An occasional brawl. Sitting on that stool, staring at the wall While spring turned to summer, then to fall. Rest of my life ain't got no better. Much as I tried, I can't forget her. A year or two, I guess I'll die. Got nothin' left and that is why....I'm Sitting in a bar, staring at the wall Brain consumed by alcohol. Just sitting on that stool, staring at the wall Waitin' for Life's final call. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Oh, that is so sad.......I feel like you just described my dad's life. If this is indeed about you....you have to stop it, because the people who care about you are hurting watching you do that to yourself...  Great poem....just hits close to home where it hurts. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Sweetheart: Mine's a cognac..  ..Seriously, if this is how life is like, change it...it really is to short for someone to be missing out...and you're far to nice a guy to be propping up some bar stool.. HUSG ps: if you're just in need of a drink, make that a double..*g* ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 10-18-1999).] |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Although it's a little different than most of what I read from you, I liked this very much. It's almost a song ! : ) Might make a great hit. ; ) If it's 'bout you....I wonder, but if so, you'll have my sympathy, if not...GREAT WRITING ! : ) |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
I like it, nay I admire it; such flavour from a talented auther. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you all for your comments and concerns but.....no, it is definitely not about me. I don't even drink. I write poetry...and this is a topic I chose. That's it. (but your well-wishes are touching and I appreciate them) |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
You cheapskate....I still want my double...ROFL...ouch!! HUSG ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 10-18-1999).] |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Good to know its not about you. It is a very good poem on a very serious subject. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Reminds me of the song, "Prop me up against the jute box when I die"--great poem Balladeer. You are so talanted! Alcahol, a crutch for a sad life. First it lifts you up, then it knocks you down. I hope this is not autobiographical. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hehehe.... There's no way this would be about you - or you'd be spending your time looking at that bar room wall instead of here playing with us... That thought never crossed my mind reading this - What did occur to me, though, was your ability to comprehend the intricacies a lifestyle that you clearly don't live... Nice job m'deer... |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
This describes my grandfather so well. He's an alcoholic, but I love him all the same. I love this poem too. [This message has been edited by Lynn (edited 10-18-1999).] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
You are a wonder Sir. You have insight that few have. I am always amazed at the depth of you and learn something new with every poem. Breathlessly awaiting the next. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
You have written so eloquently the tragedy of alcoholism. Another remarkable piece Balladeer. ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
I knew these old guys...I was a bartender for more years than I like to remember. It was sad that the barstool was the only place they had to go. Insightful poem, Balladeer. ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I enjoyed this, it did flow like a song. So descriptive of so many. So many choose to sit in a bar instead of being home, for some they have nowhere else to go perhaps. I guess there are as many reasons as there are people! Again, great work! ------------------ Denise |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
So sad! But excellent as usual,almost a musical quality to it.Liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you all, folks. You make it a pleasure to write. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can only ditto all of the above - esp. Nan's comment about your insight into a world in which you do not belong... well done, Sir! |
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Soleil Member
since 1999-06-12
Posts 113 |
Figured it wasn't about you. Seems to me you are too busy writing for stuff & nonsense of that sort. Good form for the subject. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Well stated. I think we have all known someone like this. Nocht ------------------ "Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus" (Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.") |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Balladeer: Great! Absolutely Great! Once again my friend, you prove that you is da poetic man! I never became intimate with that stool, but I think I sat on it once or twice. I swear its only got three legs. Again, I bow to you and yours for the insights that you share. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Here's my two cents dittoing the above sir, and to tell you that you make it a pleasure to READ! |
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sweetnsxy Junior Member
since 1999-10-19
Posts 10Sterling Heights, Mi, U.S.A. |
Great Poem. Great poet. |
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