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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
because she felt unbelieved she spoke the words again, to no ones ears but her own, "I did love him... I did." but she knew she lied. it could have been any him, and she dreaded admitting it. and days, like these, she hated when something inside forced honesty. it had been so easy to live the lie, his warm embrace, his touch, soft and tender. she thought she hadn't asked too much she took no more than he was willing to give. but, how many? and she pressed her eyelids tightly to block the storm that threatened. how many will it take to fill the heartless void that is the aftermath of you? "the next one", she said firmly, "will be different. one day I will love again." she hugged her arms around her tight and softly, said it again... ------------------ ©1999 Iloveit [This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 10-18-1999).] |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Sad and wistful, but very lovely still... the emotion is well expressed in this piece. ------------------ "Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Wow! This sure spoke to my heart right now. Love, so elusive, so longed for, so necessary to life much as breathing, eating or sleeping. Thanks for this piece, it made me think! ------------------ Julie Jordan Scott is a Freelance Writer and Public Speaker, but her favorite role is that of Mommy! Visit her website at http://www.5passions.com |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
thanks caroline... wistfull, good description  julie, thank you, glad you liked, it is always good to touch another's heart....even with a sad poem, we learn by our sadness |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is beautiful. Sometimes we want something so much we try many things in hope that it's the right thing. When it's not, we try another for what we have to give needs a recipient....and how do we know which one is the right one? Unfortunately, wishing doesn't always make it so. If you understand what I just said, you're in better shape than I am! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
well, I don't know if I am in any better shape than you, lol, but "..for what we have to give needs a recipient..." that talks to me, we all have love to give, just doesn't mean we are gonna be succesful in our endeavors...*sigh* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow Iloveit, this was truly a wonderful piece of writting. The story so sad and so fimilar and the message comes across loud and clear dispite it's subtleness.....BRAVO!! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
well, I had posted this in critical, cause I thought it needed improvement, but a wow from hoot sure does make me feel better about it thanks hoot |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Great poem, Lovey... and I hope that someday you find a love so wonderful there'll be no doubts! |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
thanks suthern, and yep, someday I am gonna write happy love filled poems, gettin' kinda tired of these sad ones yanno? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sometimes love comes when you least expect it. When you stop looking so hard and longing so much, there it is. The love you give, gives back. This was a beautiful poem. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Iloveit, this is such an exceptional piece. Spoke to my heart,it did.This is definetly a keeper! ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Iloveit: You never need improving, you're just lovely as you are so don't go changing anything, ok? HUSG.. ------------------ You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
Martie and Pepper, thanks glad you liked Rainbow girl, well, I am thankful I have you that sees me that way |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wonderful! And true for many I think. Very sensitive piece there... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done lloveit! ------------------ Denise |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
What a sad expression.....done in such a lovely way. Nice work here. ------------------ "To waken doubt in one Holding so fast by thine infinity; So surely anchored on The steadfast rock of immortality." ...Emily Bronte, "Last Lines" |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
severn, denise, sally, thanks, glad you liked |
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