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Iloveit
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0 posted 1999-10-18 12:42 PM



because she felt unbelieved
she spoke the words
again,
to no ones ears but her own,
"I did love him...
I did."

but she knew she lied.
it could have been any him,
and she dreaded admitting it.
and days, like these,
she hated
when something inside
forced honesty.

it had been so easy
to live the lie,
his warm embrace,
his touch,
soft and tender.
she thought she hadn't asked too much
she took no more than
he was willing to give.

but, how many?
and she pressed her eyelids tightly
to block the storm that threatened.
how many
will it take to fill
the heartless void
that is the aftermath of you?

"the next one", she said firmly,
"will be different.
one day I will love again."

she hugged her arms
around her tight and
softly, said it again...


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©1999 Iloveit



[This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 10-18-1999).]

© Copyright 1999 Iloveit - All Rights Reserved
caroline
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1 posted 1999-10-18 01:48 PM


Sad and wistful, but very lovely still...
the emotion is well expressed in this piece.

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"Tread softly, for I have spread my dreams under your feet"~~William Butler Yeats


Julie Jordan Scott
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2 posted 1999-10-18 02:13 PM


Wow! This sure spoke to my heart right now. Love, so elusive, so longed for, so necessary to life much as breathing, eating or sleeping.

Thanks for this piece, it made me think!

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Iloveit
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3 posted 1999-10-18 02:18 PM


thanks caroline... wistfull, good description

julie, thank you, glad you liked, it is always good to touch another's heart....even with a sad poem, we learn by our sadness

Balladeer
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4 posted 1999-10-18 02:23 PM


This is beautiful. Sometimes we want something so much we try many things in hope that it's the right thing. When it's not, we try another for what we have to give needs a recipient....and how do we know which one is the right one? Unfortunately, wishing doesn't always make it so.

If you understand what I just said, you're in better shape than I am!

Iloveit
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5 posted 1999-10-18 02:40 PM


well, I don't know if I am in any better shape than you, lol, but "..for what we have to give needs a recipient..." that talks to me, we all have love to give, just doesn't mean we are gonna be succesful in our endeavors...*sigh*
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 1999-10-18 03:31 PM


Wow Iloveit, this was truly a wonderful piece of writting. The story so sad and so fimilar and the message comes across loud and clear dispite it's subtleness.....BRAVO!!
Iloveit
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7 posted 1999-10-18 03:42 PM


well, I had posted this in critical, cause I thought it needed improvement, but a wow from hoot sure does make me feel better about it thanks hoot
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8 posted 1999-10-18 03:47 PM


Great poem, Lovey... and I hope that someday you find a love so wonderful there'll be no doubts!
Iloveit
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9 posted 1999-10-18 03:57 PM


thanks suthern, and yep, someday I am gonna write happy love filled poems, gettin' kinda tired of these sad ones yanno?
Martie
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10 posted 1999-10-18 04:20 PM


Sometimes love comes when you least expect it. When you stop looking so hard and longing so much, there it is. The love you give, gives back. This was a beautiful poem.
Pepper
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11 posted 1999-10-18 04:25 PM


Iloveit, this is such an exceptional piece. Spoke to my heart,it did.This is definetly a keeper!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

RainbowGirl
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12 posted 1999-10-18 06:30 PM


Iloveit: You never need improving, you're just lovely as you are so don't go changing anything, ok?

HUSG..

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


Iloveit
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13 posted 1999-10-19 09:47 AM


Martie and Pepper, thanks glad you liked

Rainbow girl, well, I am thankful I have you that sees me that way

Severn
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14 posted 1999-10-19 09:30 PM


Wonderful! And true for many I think. Very sensitive piece there...
Denise
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15 posted 1999-10-19 10:05 PM


Very well done lloveit!

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Denise

Sally S.
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16 posted 1999-10-19 10:12 PM


What a sad expression.....done in such a lovely way. Nice work here.

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"To waken doubt in one
Holding so fast by thine infinity;
So surely anchored on
The steadfast rock of immortality." ...Emily Bronte, "Last Lines"


Iloveit
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17 posted 1999-10-20 09:48 AM


severn, denise, sally, thanks, glad you liked
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