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Yearning - Challenge from Isis
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Yearning - Challenge from Isis |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Oh, my soul aches My heart cries. To need something Just to breath. To feel your touch. Kiss your lips. I am lost, Find me in this fog. Take me away. Throw away these ties. Take me, Where the moon never sleeps. Where hearts riegn. Touch me. Feel me. Love me. I tried..I hope I succeeded Isis. I don't think I like free form. |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
I thought it lovely, Marilyn. I think the lines Take me where the moon never sleeps quite enchanting  ------------------ The only man worth your tears will never make you cry... |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thankyou caroline. This is my first try at free verse. When you are used to rhyming it is difficult not to. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Great job! ------------------ It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/ |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thankyou Tara. Now if only Isis would get her butt here to read her challenges!..lol |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I don't know what you were trying, Marilyn, but you succeeded.Oh, did you succeed! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Balladeer...from you that is high praise indeed. Isis challenged me to do free verse. I have never written in this style and it was interesting. My first try was a flop and I trashed it. LOL |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I liked it!!! Keep the free form coming!! Bridgette ------------------ "It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart" |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thanks Bridget I will try. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Tada!! Wonderful job!! It's scary when you are not comfortable trying free form. I was so hesitant trying it too. You passed with flying colours. It's beautiful! And don't you feel better for trying something new? I did, at least. If you like we can challenge each other!! I'm up for it if you are!! Well done friend.. ------------------ A hero is a man who does what he can. ~Isis~ (The Fragile Rose) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
very nicely done ------------------ It is better to be silent and be considered a fool, than to speak and remove all doubt. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I think you did a wonderful job, it's a challenge to expand one's wings to soar to new levels.  |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
I liked this a lot too Marilyn. : ) Guess I'll be seeing you in class again soon. : ) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I missed this the first time! This is great, Marilyn! ------------------ Denise |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thanks Lost Dreamer, Munda and Denise. I am so very flattered that someone would go through the pages and pull this back up again. I am humbled. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Liked this much! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Lilli Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 21Melbourne, Australia |
I thought that was really lovely. And for your first attempt at free verse, it was fantastic! very talented! (and just think, I can't rhyme for anything, so you must have something over me!!!) *grins* Well Done Marilyn |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I like it the second time round too, Maz ------------------ Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing... ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Well done! |
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